考研英语看作文范例点评：养老“足球赛”

　　2015考研英语看图作文范例点评：养老足球赛

　　写作原文

　　As is depicted in the picture,a poor old man,rolling like a football,is kicked between his three sons and daughter.Unwilling to be responsible for their father ,the daughter and sons spare no effort to kick the old man as far as possible.We are irritated to see in the picture the pathetic fact that these people go to any length to avoid surporting their parents. Unfortunately, what we have seen in the picture isnt a rare phenomenon. However,what factor it is that results in this situation? For one thing, in my opinion, the decreased importance attached to the moral education contributes to the lack of ethnic conception,leadiing to the consequence that paople don t esteem and value their parents . For another ,faced with the pressure of work and house installment ,young people can hardly make ends meet let alone taking good care of their old parents who is fragile to a sudden disease such as heart attack.There is no denying that further attention must be paid to the problem by the government .To handle this worsening situation,more money should be involed in the pension to guarantee the daily life of old people. In addition, instead of merely focusing on the scores,schools ought to put more stress on moral education.

　　总体点评

　　考研作文的整体思路你已经基本掌握;但还存在个别简单的语法错误、单词拼写错误及汉语式英语的问题。建议作者多读、多积累好的词汇及句子;之后可按照佳句进行模仿，以达到用地道的英语表达方式描述自己想法的目的;再者，写完之后一定要认真检查，减少失分点。

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