考研英语小作文批改求职信0-4分例文2

　　考研英语待批改作文：

　　0-4分

　　第二篇

　　Dear sir or madam,

　　I am writing this letter to apply for a position of secretary.

　　I am a student of Beijing University. I will graduate from Business English major in June 2013.Because of my major, I have been studying English all the time. Now I could communication with foreigner fluently. Also I was past the test for English Majors-Brand eight. Moreover, I had past national computer test brand three before I enter university. I can skilled operate the majority of office software.

　　Please give me a(改为an) interview. Connect me with number 123456.I am looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英语作文批改点评如下：

　　Dear sir or madam,

　　I am writting(拼写错误，改为writing) this letter(删除) to apply for a position of(改为as) secretary.

　　I am a student of Beijing University. I will graduate from Business English major in June 2013.Because of my major, I have been studying English all the time. Now I could comunication(改为communicate)with foreigner fluently. Also I was past(改为passed) the test for English Majors-Brand eight. Moreover, I had past national computer test brand three before I enter university. I can skilled operate the majority of office software.

　　Please give me a(改为an) interview. Connect me with number 123456.I am looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　2分

　　同学你好，你的英语基础比较薄弱，还是建议你多背模版，另外，你的应聘职位最好能与你的专业和工作经历相关。