GMAT考试写作指导：Argument范文三八

　　In this argument the author concludes that West Cambria can increase revenues

　　and provide better care to accident victims by disbanding the volunteer ambulance

　　service and hiring a commercial one. The author reasons that this change would yield

　　additional revenues because service fees could be imposed for ambulance use. The

　　author also reasons that the city would provide better service to accident victims

　　because a commercial service would respond more quickly to accidents than a volunteer

　　service would. The authors argument is flawed in two respects.

　　To begin with, the authors plan for raising revenue for West Cambria is

　　questionable. Unless the service fees are considerable or the accident rate is extremely

　　high, it is unlikely that significant revenues will be raised by charging a fee for

　　ambulance use. Consequently, revenue generation is not a good reason to disband the

　　volunteer service and hire a commercial service.

　　Next, the authors belief that better patient care would be provided by a

　　commercial ambulance service than by a volunteer service is based on insufficient

　　evidence. The fact that the commercial service in East Cambria has a lower average

　　response time than the volunteer service in West Cambria is insufficient evidence for the

　　claim that this will be the case for all commercial services. Moreover, the authors

　　recommendation depends upon the assumption that response time to an accident is the

　　only factor that influences patient care. Other pertinent factors―such as ambulance-

　　crew proficiency and training, and emergency equipment―are not considered.

　　In conclusion, this argument is unconvincing. To strengthen the argument the

　　author would have to show that substantial revenue for the town could be raised by

　　charging service fees for ambulance use. Additionally, the author would have to provide

　　more evidence to support the claim that commercial ambulance services provide better

　　patient care than volunteer services.