英语六级待批改作文:
The chart is used to illustrate the change that the number of users is increasing.It shows there were only 200 users in 1999, but it surged to 500 ina short span ofthree years. And in the next three years,the number is twice as much as its in 2002.
There are two reasons to explainthis phenomenon. At first, with the development of technology, the phonesare lower in price and moreplentiful in function. Moreover, the society and the relationship with others require you to use cell phone to keep connection.
It is convenient to keep in touch with others, especiallyin the modern world, youare always waiting the calls by your boss, your colleagues and even your friends who want to chat withyou. It looks like a net which tangle you. I dont mean it is bad or something negtive, but remember, let yourmind escape from the calls occasionally.
英语六级作文批改如下:
The chart is used to illustrate the change that the number of users is increasing.It shows there were only 200 users in 1999, but it surged to 500 ina short span ofthree years. Andin the next three yearstwice as much asitin 2002.
There are two reasons to explainthis phenomenon. At first, with the development of technology, the phonesarelower in price and moreplentiful in function. Moreover, the societyand the relationship with othersrequire you to use cell phone to keep connection.
It is convenient to keep in touch with others, especiallyin the modern world,(改为句号)youare always waiting the callsby(改为from)your boss, your colleagues and even your friends who want to chat withyou. It looks like a net whichtangleyou. I dont mean it is bad or somethingnegtive, but remember, let yourmind escape from the calls occasionally.
同学你好,你的英语基础不错,用词等都很好,但是要保持时态一致。另外,第三段的时候,你用了tangle这个词,已经表明你的态度是negative了,可是你后面又解释了一下。在四六级作文中,尽量明确表明你的态度,否则判卷老师很有可能认为你没有自己的观点。
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