英语六级待批改作文:
Fast Food is more popular though citizens, especially young man and children. They eat them at least once a week.
The time of the people to have a break and to eat meal is compressed by citizens who work hard though the fast pace of life in modern society. So they choose Western Fast Food which is made to convenient and you-dont-wait, of course its delicious, that they can have much more time to work.
As for children, maybe Fast Food is the in-thing among them. Eating a KFC will be pride in their young heart. They will share the experience of enjoying KFC or MacDonald to their best friends. Unforgettable delicious for children is as it should be.
As far as I am concerned, the collective canteen which should offer high quality food must be opened more by company. For children, parents ought to educate kids what is healthy food and what food shouldnt be eat more.
作文批改如下:
(加Western)Fast Food is more popular though(改为among citizens, especially young man and children. They eat them at least once a week.
The time of the people to have a break and to eat meal is compressed by citizens who work hard though the fast pace of life in modern society. So they choose Western Fast Food which is made to convenient and you-dont-wait, of course its delicious,(改为convenient and delicious)(加so)that they can have much more time to work.
As for children, maybe Fast Food is the in-thing(错误) among them. Eating a(改为in) KFC will be pride in their young heart. They will share the experience of enjoying KFC or MacDonald to(改为with) their best friends. Unforgettable delicious for children is as it should be.
As far as I am concerned, the collective canteen which should offer high quality food must be opened more by company(删除). For children, parents ought to educate kids what is healthy food and what food shouldnt be eat more.
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