我的文具盒是一年前妈妈给我买的,虽然它已经“老”了,但我还是十分珍惜它。
My mother bought my stationery box a year ago. Although it is "old", I still cherish it very much.
我的文具盒是用铁皮做成的。拿在手里,首先映入眼帘的是上面的画。左边有一个趴在地上的大脸花猫,它脸上呈现出一种痛苦的表情,好像是因为刚刚重重地跌倒过的缘故吧。右边有好几排英文字母, 上面写的好像是这只猫的自述。虽然不能完全看懂,但是我也能翻译几句话。文具盒全身绿色,但因时间长生了锈和我在上面贴了贴画的缘故,使它变得与一点儿杂乱了。
My pencil case is made of iron sheet. Hold it in your hand, the first thing you see is the picture above. There is a big face cat lying on the left. It has a painful expression on its face, as if it has just fallen heavily. There are several lines of English letters on the right, which seem to be the cat's self-report. Although I can't understand it completely, I can also translate a few words. The stationery box is green all over, but due to the rust of time and the stickers I pasted on it, it has become a bit messy.
打开盖子,里面装满了学习用品。文具盒分为上、中、下三层。上面一层“睡着”两支水笔,一支是蓝的,一支是黑的。它们“躺”在一把绿色的铁质直尺上,一点儿声音都没有,好像正在酣睡。中层里“横”着一个蓝色的橡皮,放着两支短得快不能使用的铅笔和一支闪亮的红色水笔。下层因为空间小,就在里面“藏”着一些笔芯。
Open the lid. It's full of school supplies. The stationery box is divided into three layers: upper, middle and lower. The upper layer "sleeps" two water pens, one is blue and the other is black. They "lie" on a green iron ruler, with no sound at all, as if they were sleeping soundly. In the middle layer, there is a blue eraser, two short and unusable pencils and a shiny red water pen. Because of the small space in the lower layer, there are some refills in it.
文具盒虽然是用来供我学习用的,但是这个庞大的盒下,还“躲”着四个小轮子,只要将文具盒轻轻一推,它就能平稳地向前驶去。因为它比较长,再加上下面有“乘客”们便陆续下车,帮助我学习。
Although the stationery box is used for my study, under this huge box, there are still four small wheels. As long as you push the stationery box gently, it can move forward smoothly. Because it is relatively long, plus the following "passengers" will get off one after another to help me learn.
我的文具盒给我带来了欢乐,我爱我的文具盒。
My pencil box brings me joy. I love my pencil box.
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1.文章通过对文具盒的详尽描写,体现出小作者对它的喜爱之情。文章按照由外而内、由上至下的顺序,将文具盒的外表图画、内部构造及放置的物品描述得具体全面。内容丰富,层次分明,结构完整。
1. Through the detailed description of the stationery box, the article reflects the love of the author. According to the order from the outside to the inside and from the top to the bottom, the paper describes the exterior picture, the interior structure and the items placed in the pencil box in a concrete and comprehensive way. The content is rich, the level is clear and the structure is complete.
2.语言运用精妙,用丰富的词语来表现文具盒内物品的摆放状态,如“睡着”、“横”、“藏”......对小轮子的描写采用了“躲”字,既生动又准确。
2. The use of language is exquisite, and rich words are used to show the placement of items in the stationery box, such as "sleeping", "horizontal", "hidden"... The description of the small wheel adopts the word "hidden", which is vivid and accurate.
3.文章的描写生动形象,比喻贴切。语言自然流畅,叙述有条不紊,整体感强。
3. The description of the article is vivid and figurative. The language is natural and fluent, the narration is orderly, and the whole feeling is strong.
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