2016届山东省胶州市高考英语二轮写作赏析精编（5）

　　山东省胶州市2016高考英语（二轮）写作赏析精编（5）及参考范文

　　2016书面表达训练

　　假设你是李华，在互联网上看到英国高中生Tom登的一则启事：希望结识一位中国朋友，以便学习中国的语言和文化。请你以李华的名义用英文给Tom发一封电子邮件，主要内容包括： 1. 你怎样得知Tom的愿望； 2. 你愿意成为他的朋友； 3. 你打算如何帮助他； 4. 你盼望他的回复。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯； 3. 电子邮件的格式已为你写好，但不计入总词数。 DearTom,

　　I’ve learned _____________________________________________________________________

　　_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Hua

　　【参考范文】

　　Dear Tom,

　　I’ve learned it from the Internet that you want to make a Chinese friend so as to learn the Chinese language and culture. I’m glad that you show such great interest in China and I would like to be your friend.

　　I’ll try my best to write to you as often as possible to introduce you the Chinese culture. When you have an opportunity to come to China, I’ll teach you how to speak Chinese and show you around some famous historical places of interest. Anyway, I’m going to help you as much as I can. How do you think?

　　I’m looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Hua

　　【广东省高三考前冲刺卷】

　　读写任务(共1小题，满分25分)

　　阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。

　　Halloween is very popular in western countries.On October 31st，dozens of children dressed in costumes(节日服装) knock on their neighbors’ doors and yell “Trick or Treat” when the door opens.Pirates and princesses，ghosts and popular heroes of the day all hold bags open to catch the candy or other goodies that the neighbors drop in.As they give each child a treat the neighbors exclaim over the costumes and try to guess who is under the masks.

　　Today school dances and neighborhood parties called 揵lock parties?are popular among the young and the old.Moreig and more adults celebrate Halloween.They dress up like historical or political figures and go to masquerade parties(化装舞会)．In larger cities，costumed children and their parents gather at shopping malls early in the evening.Stores and businesses give parties with games and treats for the children.Teenagers enjoy costume dances at their schools and the more outrageous the costume，the better!

　　Certain pranks(恶作剧) such as soaping car windows and tipping over garbage cans are expected.But partying and pranks are not the only things that Halloweeners enjoy doing.Some collect money to buy food and medicine for needy children around the world.

　　写作内容

　　1．以约30词概括短文的要点。

　　2．以约120词就“中西节日的不同”为主题写一篇短文，并包含以下内容要点：

　　(1)你还知道哪些西方节日？你印象中的西方节日有哪些特点？

　　(2)请具体讲述一个你熟悉的中国传统节日；

　　(3)你更喜欢中国传统节日，还是西方节日？为什么？

　　写作要求

　　你可以使用实例或其他论述方法支持你的论点，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不要抄袭阅读材料中的句子。

　　评分标准

　　概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯。

　　________________________________________________________________________

　　读写任务【参考范文】

　　On October 31st，people in western countries dress themselves in costumes to celebrate Halloween.School dances and neighbourhood parties are popular on that day.Pranks are played for fun.

　　Many western festivals are very popular all over the world，such as Christmas，Thanksgiving Day，April Fool’s Day and so on.Personally，I think the western festivals are romantic and exciting.Colourful decorations are filled with all streets.People will gather together and hold parties.They have a good time singing and dancing during the parties.

　　Traditional Chinese festivals are popular too.The Mid璦utumnn Festival is my favourite.It falls on the fifteenth day of the eighth lunar month.On this day，the moon is said to be its biggest and brightest so people meet in the evening and watch the moon.This festival is important because it is a special occasion for family.The traditional food，mooncakes，are made with bean paste，but nowadays there are many different kinds of mooncakes，including fruit，coffee and even ice­cream mooncakes.

　　In my opinion，I prefer the traditional Chinese festivals to western festivals.China has a long history and its festivals are full of cultural meanings.Chinese people enjoy food，the traditional activities of the festivals as well as the love of their motherland.

　　【北京市丰台区2016统一模拟】第二节 情景作文(20分)

　　假设你是红星中学高二(1)班的学生李华，下面四幅图描述了你们家上周收留流浪狗的真实故事，请根据图片的先后顺序，为校刊“英语园地”写一篇短文。

　　注意：1. 文章的开头已为你写好。

　　2. 词数不少于60。

　　Last Friday，

　　第二节 情景作文(20分)

　　一、评分原则：

　　1. 本题总分为20分，按5个档次给分。

　　2. 评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言质量初步确定其档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。

　　3. 评分时应考虑：内容要点的完整性、上下文的连贯、词汇和句式的多样性及语言的准确性。

　　4. 拼写、标点符号或书写影响内容表达时，应视其影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。

　　5. 词数少于60，从总分中减去1分。

　　二、内容要点：

　　1. 发现流浪狗并带回家

　　2. 给小狗喂食、洗澡

　　3. 讨论是否留下小狗

　　4. 遛狗、和小狗玩耍

　　三、各档次的给分范围和要求：

　　第一档 完全完成了试题规定的任务。

　　·覆盖了所有内容要点；

　　·运用了多样的句式和丰富的词汇；

　　·语法或用词方面有个别错误，但为尽可能表达丰富的内容所致；体现了较强的语言运用能力；

　　·有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，所写内容连贯、结构紧凑。

　　完全达到了预期的写作目的。

　　18分—20分

　　第二档 完全完成了试题规定的任务。

　　·覆盖了所有内容要点：

　　·运用的句式和词汇能满足任务要求；

　　·语法和用词基本准确，少许错误主要为尽可能表达丰富的内容所致；

　　·使用了简单的语句间连接成分，所写内容连贯。

　　达到了预期的写作目的。

　　15分—17分

　　第三档 基本完成了试题规定的任务。

　　·覆盖了内容要点：

　　·运用的句式和词汇基本满足任务要求；

　　·语法和用词方面有一些错误，但不影响理解。

　　基本达到了预期的写作目的。

　　12分—14分

　　第四档 未恰当完成试题规定的任务。

　　·漏掉或未描述清楚主要内容；

　　·所用句式和词汇有限；

　　·语法或用词方面的错误影响了对所写内容的理解。

　　未能清楚地传达信息。

　　6分—11分

　　第五档 未完成试题规定的任务。

　　·明显遗漏主要内容；

　　·句式单调、词汇贫乏；

　　·语法或用词方面错误较多，严重影响了对所写内容的理解。

　　1分—5分

　　0分 未能传达任何信息；所写内容与要求无关。

　　四、Possible versions:

　　Possible version 1:

　　Last Friday, on the way home from school, I found a dirty puppy dog lying beside the dustbin. He was so weak that he couldn't open his eyes. I felt sorry for the puppy and carried him home immediately. After feeding him food and milk, I gave him a shower. I was so glad to see the dog recover. He was so lovely and I wanted to keep him. After discussing the situation with my parents, I decided to adopt him. Today the dog has become part of our family. We walk him in the park, play with him and take good care of him. He brings us happiness and keeps us company.

　　(111 words)

　　Possible version 2:

　　Last Friday, a chance encounter changed me and my family's life greatly.

　　After school, I was about to enter my apartment building when a little dirty dog, lying beside the dustbin, caught my eye. He looked extremely weak. Immediately the homeless dog filled me with sympathy. So I bent down and held him in my arms. I rushed him upstairs and right away fixed him some food. Then, I gave him a bath. After the bath he looked energetic and refreshed. What a lovely dog!

　　When my parents got home, I asked if I could keep the dog. To my surprise and happiness, they agreed. From that day, he has become a member of our family. Everyone has enjoyed his company. My parents walk him often. He and I play joyfully.

　　Looking at the cute, happy dog today. I realize that I did the fight thing. I brought him to a warm, loving home and he has brought us great happiness and laughter.

　　(161 words)