湖南省长沙县实验中学2016届高三英语二轮复习书面表达复习重点话题指导专题12 人物类话题指导（教师版）

　　实例指导1—— 人物介绍

　　【写作任务】

　　2008年4月7日在巴黎圣火传递中，一名残疾女孩感动了所有人，当时火炬传递现场不断有“藏独”分子上前抢夺火炬，甚至有暴徒直接攻击她柔弱的身躯，但她死死护住火炬，用脸上灿烂的笑容和残缺的身体捍卫了圣火的尊严，已深深地印在了所有热爱中国、关注奥运的人们心中，她就是金晶—一个27岁的残疾人运动员，在九岁时时因病作了截肢手术，但她一直保持着积极乐观的生活方式。

　　请根据上面提供的材料，写一篇介绍金晶的短文。 字数：120-150

　　生词：Tibet independence protestors 藏独分子

　　第一步

　　仔细审题，确立主题，明确要求

　　根据文字提示可以确定：写作主要人称为第三人称，字数150左右，体裁为记叙文，时态以一般过去式为主。

　　第二步

　　围绕主题，提炼要点，编拟提纲

　　第一段：引出主题（① 世界被一个27岁誓死保卫火炬的中国女孩感动了）。然后描述详细过程（② 在火炬手选拔中，金晶被选为海外火炬手；③当圣火在巴黎传递时，有藏独分子攻击金晶；④金晶不顾个人安危，；⑤她紧紧抱住火炬致使暴徒没有得逞）最后交待结果（⑥她的微笑和勇敢深深地印在了所有热爱中国、关注奥运的人们心中）。

　　第二段：介绍金晶的成长经历（②她是上海的一名残疾人运动员；③⑧九岁时因病截肢；④⑨截肢并没有带走她生活中的快乐；⑤在教室里妨碍别人走路，她就不撑拐杖，单脚跳；⑥2001年，2001年7月13日参加到上海轮椅击剑队,成为一名轮椅击剑队的队员并在比赛中多次赢得奖牌⑦是她的可爱与乐观使她最选为奥运会境外火炬传递手。）再谈自己受的启发（⑧我从她那里学习到很多，我要成为像她一样积极的人，努力实现自己的目标）。

　　第三步 分析要点及提纲，提炼关键单词和短语。

　　第四步 恰当使用句型，连词成句。

　　① On April 7th,2008, the world was touched by a 27-year-old Chinese girl named Jin Jing.

　　② Through the process of Olympic torch bearer selection, Jin became an overseas torch bearer.

　　③ When the Olympic torch was being relayed in Paris, Jin Jing was attacked by Tibet independence protestors during the torch exchange, who attempted to grab the torch in her hands. 

　　④ Without concern for her own safety, Jin did everything she could to protect the Olympic flame.

　　⑤ She held the torch so tightly that the attackers failed to get it.

　　⑥ Her smile and bravery impressed all the people who are friendly to China and concerned about Olympics.

　　⑦ Jin is a disabled athlete from Shanghai.

　　⑧ When she was nine years old, she lost one leg because of her illness.

　　⑨ Jin Jing does not lose her joy for life after losing her leg. 

　　⑩ Her loveliness and optimism are infectious to everyone around her wherever she is.

　　【教师点评】

　　作者抓住了反映金晶无畏精神的事件进行了详细的描写，整个事件的发生、过程、结果都交代的条理、清楚。叙述时短语（下划线）起了很好的衬托作用，选词得当。另外，句型（斜体）和连接词（黑体）也在文中起了烘托作用。尽管是介绍人物，但将整个事件准确地描述出来也需要作者具有一定的写作基础。总之，该习作达到了写作目的。

　　【句型拓展】

　　beyond.

　　9. Her fearlessness was infectious and touched the heart of the entire nation

　　10. Out of instinct, I clung to the torch and held it close to my body until a few French policemen came to my rescue.

　　11. The citizens of Paris were touched by Jin Jing and they applauded her as she finished her leg.

　　12. There are still four months to go before the first gold medal is decided at the Beijing Games, but China is  already celebrating its first Olympic hero - a wheelchair-bound amputee who defended the flame in extraordinary circumstances. 

　　13. Upon her return to Beijing, Jin was treated to a hero's welcome as crowds gathered to….

　　14. The story of… quickly spread across …. 

　　实例指导2—人物传记

　　【写作任务】

　　请根据以下内容提示，以Chopin－a great musician 为题，写一篇120词左右的英语短文，介绍著名的音乐家肖邦。

　　1．1810年2月12日，肖邦出生于波兰。

　　2．肖邦最初接触音乐是跟随母亲学钢琴。六岁那年，肖邦创作出了人生的第一部作品，充分展现了他非凡的音乐天赋。

　　3．16岁时，肖邦进入华沙音乐学院学习，师从德国音乐家J．A．P埃尔斯纳(JosephElsner)。

　　4．离开华沙音乐学院后，肖邦来到了当时的音乐圣地——维也纳。在那里，肖邦不仅举行了多场音乐会，也发表了不少音乐作品。

　　5．1849年，肖邦逝世于巴黎的寓所中，结束了短短39年的生命。

　　6．肖邦是近代世界闻名的作曲家和钢琴家。他一生创作了近150首深受人们喜爱的乐曲。

　　注意：

　　参考词汇：作品composition；华沙音乐学院the Warsaw Conservatory of Music；寓所dwelling

　　【写作指导】

　　人物传记是记录人物事迹的一种文学体裁。人物传记一般要介绍人物的童年、少年、青年、中年及老年的成长经历(包括生活、工作和学习)，末尾一般总结人物的功绩成败，也可以在记叙成长历程的同时加入一些议论。人物传记通常以时间为线索，以事件为载体，将全文贯通一气。由于表达的需要，经常采用顺叙、倒叙或插叙等手法。

　　书写传记要全面景统地掌握所写人物的材料。传记不仅要记述人物的生平事迹，而且要表钉出一种思想倾向和精神面貌，并告诉人们一个道理，供人们仿效借鉴，所以传记被认为是“人生的教科书”。

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　　常见的传记写作顺序有：1)以时间先后为顺序；2)以空间的变换为顺序；3)以作者的认识发展为顺序。采用时间顺序的居多。

　　这种文体的写作时态主要是过去时。

　　1849，Chopin died at the age of 39 in Paris．

　　【教师点评】

　　1．总体评价：

　　作者能根据本文特点进行组材， 按要点提示以时间为线索介绍了肖邦的一生，所写文章符合写作要求。文章中一些较复杂句式的使用，突出了文章的壳点，同时也说明了作者较强的语言功底。另外，文章时态把握很好。

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　　2．亮点或采分点：

　　①文中使用了一些较高级词汇，如：outstanding；directed；unquestioned等。

　　②使用了一些较复杂句式，如：定语从句、分词结构。

　　实例指导3—我的母亲

　　【写作任务】

　　　学校校刊正在进行“我的母亲”的征文活动。请按照下面所提供的主要内容，以“我的母亲”为题，写一篇12－150词的短文。

　　1. 我的母亲是个农村妇女，40多岁，没上过学，但懂得年轻人掌握知识的重要性，她很关心我的学习情况；

　　2. 我的母亲为了让你有更多的时间学习，总是竭尽全力来照顾你。一次，当我听说母亲病重，回家看她时，她正带病坚持为你做新衣，我激动得热泪盈眶；

　　3. 我母亲就是这样一位妇女，善良、勤劳，永远值得你尊敬和爱戴。

　　【思路指导】

　　人物介绍类书面表达的写作要求，通常要求考生根据提示介绍一种特定的人物，可以是伟人、 开头：文章的开头在书面表达中的作用不言而喻，可画龙点睛，可引人入胜。人物介绍的开头可以开门见山，直接介绍主人公，也可引用相关资讯开头语进行介绍，内容包括：出生时间、地点，外貌以及职业等。

　　结尾：好的开头可以吸引读者的注意力，同样，好的结尾让人深思、回味，增添丈章的效果和说服力，使读者对你的丈章留下深刻的印象。其方式有：总结性的结尾；启发性的含蓄结尾；鼓动型结尾；首尾照应型结尾等。而人物介绍类书面表达则根据需要而定，即结尾

　　有法，但无定法。

　　在写这类题目时我们要注意下面的几个问题：

　　1．根据所提供的材料组织文章。首先应确定标题。如：My mother – a normal but kind woman 等，这样就为下面的开展理情了思路，明确了要写作的内容和对象。

　　2． 叙述时，要有开头语，多为主题句，点名本人的主要身份，并且要注意开头与下文的语言衔接要自然，意思要连贯，合情合理。

　　3．本文要求写的是现阶段的活动或起居情况的话，我们要采用一般现在时。而且，主语为第三人称单数时，谓语动词要用第三人称单数形式。

　　    4．频度副词的运用， 恰当地运用频度副词（如：sometimes / often / usually / never等）会使你的作文更加完美，但不是每个句子都一定要用上这些词。

　　    5．要突出人物特点 ，在写人物活动，尤其是日常起居情况时，我们不要像记流水帐那样一一俱细，要根据题目要求和自己对题目的理解，把能突出人物特点的略做突出。哪怕只有一两句，也能为你的作文增色不少。

　　【范文欣赏】

　　My mother

　　My dear mother is a village woman，who is already in her forties. Although she had very little school education , yet she knows that knowledge is of great importance to young people. So she often asks me how I get along with my studies and encourages me to study hard.

　　My mother always takes good care of me and does everything she can for me，so that I can spend more time on my study.

　　Once she was badly ill because of hard work and had stayed in bed for several days. When I got home to see her ， I found she was sitting in bed， making new clothes for me ！ I was so deeply moved that tears came to

　　my eyes.

　　Such is my mother，a kind and hard-working woman. I will try my best to make mother happy .

　　实例指导4— 介绍你的偶像

　　【写作任务】

　　某英文报社征集人物介绍，你打算应征并写篇英语短文介绍你喜欢的音乐人――周杰伦。请根据下面表格提示，写一篇英语短文。

　　姓名：周杰伦 英文名：Jay Chou

　　出生年月：1979.1.18 籍贯：中国台湾

　　生平 1． 出生在一个单亲家庭，母亲含辛茹苦地抚养他长大。

　　2．从小父母离异，生活孤独，但表现出惊人的音乐天赋。

　　3．三岁学习钢琴，擅长蓝调音乐（R&B）和说唱音乐(rap)，出过许多专辑。

　　4．他的歌曲受到全世界华人的喜爱。

　　注意：

　　1．词数：120左右

　　2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

　　【参考范文】

　　Born

　　on January 18th, 1979 in Taiwan, Zhou Jielun, with Jay Chou as his English name, is a popular musician specializing in R&B and rap.

　　With his mother's encouragement, he learned to play the piano at an early age and finally developed his great love for music. Because his parents got divorced when he was young, he grew up very lonely. As a gifted boy, he is absorbed in his own music world. Whenever any musical idea comes to his mind, he could write it down quickly.

　　Now

　　Jay

　　Chou

　　has become a household name in China. He has created many songs which are loved by many Chinese people at home and abrood.

　　And

　　now

　　he

　　is

　　a successful singer, an excellent actor and even a director.

　　实战演练

　　《英语辅导报》高三版正在征集以 My Grandmother 为题的文章。请根据下列要求，写一篇介绍奶奶的记叙文，以便向该报投稿。

　　1. 70 岁，头发花白；

　　2. 和蔼、善良、乐于助人，邻里关系融洽；

　　3. 身体健康，生活简朴；

　　4. 喜欢看电视，对《对话》，京剧（ Beijing Opera ）感兴趣；

　　5. 教育我以诚待人，做有用人才。

　　注意：

　　1. 词数： 100 左右；

　　2. 可适当增加要点，使短文连贯。

　　My Grandmother

　　My grandmother is seventy years of age who has a head of gray hair. My grandmother get along well with her neighbours. She is a kind-hearted person and is always ready to help others， so whenever people get into

　　Those who study with Jenny in the same class will remember her as an excellent girl. She is the tallest girl in our class. Her eyes are big and bright. She has a high nose and her teeth are as white as snow. We made her our monitor not for her fine looks， but for her good qualities. She is good at her lessons and ready to help others. She never quarrels with anyone about small things.

　　She is good－mannered. But on the playground she is like a naughty boy. How can one forget her if he or she has been with her for quite some time？

　　y Favorite Sports Star—Yao Ming

　　When it comes to the sports stars, I would like to say that Yao Ming is one of the best in the world. As is known to all, Yao is an excellent basketball player. Born on September 12th, 1980 in Shanghai, he is now 2.26 meters tall and 134 kilograms in weight.

　　At the age of 17, Yao joined Shanghai Basketball team and became a member of Chinese national team in 1998. And then, in 2000, he was selected as a member of the Asian All-Star Basketball team. Two years later, the Shanghai Basketball team won the champion of CBA and he was among the top players in it. In the same year, he went to the US and became number one overall pick in NBA draft, which helped him join the team of Houston Rockets.

　　Thanks to his wonderful performances in games, he has become the hero in many people’s hearts. And as a result of his deep love for our country, I respect him more than ever. Besides, his easygoing manner and sense of

　　My Favorite Writer—Guo Jingming

　　Guo Jingming is a famous young writer in China. Most of the students have heard of him or read his books. And he is also my favorite writer. Born in 1983, he has published many popular books till now, such as Visionary and The Summer Still Doesn’t Come. These books touch the readers’heart deeply. My tears often run down while I am reading his books. His words are plain, but they have a magic power to make people feel quite close to him.

　　Guo, like many youths, doesn’t want to grow up. In fact, I find many of his ideas are the same as mine. Maybe that is one of the main reasons I like him. Besides, I learn a lot from him. For example, he is a good student as well as a talented writer. I often tell myself if I want to be a writer like him when I grow up, I must study hard.