In the first, the writers control of language struck me. The story is simple, though it has a cruel ending, and the writer has told it in simple, straightforward language without any unnecessary embellishment. Notice how few adjectives and adverbs there are. The weather is simply cold. This is enough to explain why the brother was wearing gloves and it would not have helped the story to have added anything.
The essay also shows control of the ideas and structure; a plain narrative that is concluded by the critical event. The writer has sensibly avoided putting any moral lesson or commentary at the end. It is quite clear to the reader how the brother must have felt and the stark and almost brutal ending speaks for itself? no expression of regret, unhappiness, or complaint about the cruelty of life. None is needed. My one criticism of the essay is the choice of title, Forgetting the gloves shows carelessness. I think this is too explicit and takes away from the surprise ending. It would have been better simply to call it The gloves and left the reader to wonder what the connection between gloves and job-hunting was.
The second essay stood out because of the sudden and very unexpected twist to the story? an apparent success which is then rejected. Again, the writer has controlled her story well and kept the ending simple and effective. Notice once more the relative absence of adjectives, with only one that is metaphorical? eagle eyes. All the others are factual descriptions, giving the basic information that makes the story real.
给予礼品(Giving a Gift)
尊重家长的方案(Respecting Parents Programme)
我的家乡(My Home Town)
在你心目中,什么才是美?(What is beauty in your mind?)
意外(An Accident)
中考英语辅导:新鲜空气(FreshAir)
对“嫦娥一号”成功发射的感想
中考英语书面表达常犯错误分析
未来的生活(Life in the future)
篮球是我的最爱(Basketball is My Favorite)
中考英语辅导:上学路上(OnMyWaytoSchool)
永远长不大的小天使(Little Angels Forever grow up)
老师,我要感谢你(I want to thank you,teacher)
中考英语辅导:上海的公共交通(ThePublicTransportinShanghai)
错误的教训(A lesson of my mistake)
国庆节作文:A Wonderful Traveling
比较美国的初中生活和中国的初中生活有什么不同
散步(Walking)
中学生正确的放松方式(The proper ways for students to relax)
保卫地球(Saving the Earth)
关于中学生饮食健康的
做三明治的过程
知识和信心通向成功之路(Knowledge and Confidence Lead to Success)
杭州(MYCITY)
寒假去哈尔滨旅游
日记(English Diary)
写你想感谢的人(The person you want to thank)
中考英语考前必备--议论文写作模板
传统的节日(Traditional festional)
画蛇添足(Add Feet)
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