考研英语复习资料考研英语作文范文的批改39

　　考研英语待批改作文：

　　Dear Manager,

　　When I read your advertisement in the newspaper,I really have passion to apply a position of Technical Director.

　　Its a giant challenge to put my technical knowledge into practice.

　　There have two reasons for this application as follow.First of all,I have six_year experience as an Assistant Technical Director

　　in an international company,which made me could deal with different technical problems as soon as possible.

　　Secondly,as a graduate student who finished technical program in a specialization college,I have a large number of technical certifications.

　　There have a strong ambition in my mind,pushing me want to work for your company as an Technical Director.

　　I attached my resume as below,please read.I will be appreciated if you can give me an interview.Looking forward to your reply.

　　Thank you very much!

　　Yours faithfully,

　　Li Ming.

　　考研英语作文批改点评如下：

　　Dear Manager,

　　When I read your advertisement in the newspaper, I really have passion to apply a position of(改成for，apply for) Technical Director.Its a giant challenge to put my technical knowledge into practice. There have two reasons for this application as follow. First of all, I have six_year(six-year) experience as an Assistant Technical Director in an international company, which made me could deal with different technical problems as soon as possible.Secondly, as a graduate student who finished technical program in a specialization college, I have a large number of technical certifications. There have a strong ambition in my mind, pushing me want(去掉，pushing可以表达此意)to work for your company as an(应该用a) Technical Director.I attached my resume as(去掉)below, please read. I will be appreciated if you can give me an interview. Looking forward to your reply.Thank you very much!(这一部分去掉) Yours faithfully,

　　Li Ming. 点评：6分最后一段简洁结尾即可。中间的部分是文章的主题，第二条内容有点空。语言表达能力有待加强。