考研英语作文批改范例13

　　To whom it may concern, 　　I am writing to express my request to support tuition fee of （建议删掉）a stundent （student）in （需要冠词a）remote area. 　　I wonder if it is convenvient（convenient） for you to offer me partcular（particular） accounts of the child regarging（reagarding） his/（or）her family background. Firstly, the child most come from West China（建议改为I prefer a child from the western part of China） because it is improtant to train the talent（educat a talent哪一个更好？） for local area（根据你要表达的意思，建议改为It is important to develop the education situation there. ）. Secondly, the child was forced to drop out of school for the reason that family could not afford his/ her education. 　　I will provide all his/her expendure（expenditure） at school untill（until） he/she graduates from school. I promise（原文更好） that I will perform my responsibilities.（都可以） 　　I would like to （只需要would，would like to do意义不同。）be grateful for your replay. 　　Yours sincerely 　　Li Ming