6月大学英语六级写作实例讲评（三）

　　How to improve students mental health

　　1、 大学生的心理健康十分重要

　　2、 因此，学校可以......

　　3、 我们自己应当......

　　题目分析：

　　学生的心理健康是近年来被热议的话题之一，属于经典的问题解决型，故不外乎采用举例子，作比较，分类别，列数字，打比方等方式讨论。

　　参考范文：

　　Students mental health has been playing an increasingly important role in our day-to-day life. Indeed, it is widely accepted that it has gained growing popularity among persons in all walks of life. There is a general discussion today about the issue of disorder in brains.

　　Obviously, it is necessary that effective actions should be taken to prevent problems. Authorities in universities play a critical role in the situation. To begin with, schools, such as colleges or universities, can provide chances for the young men to ease their attention. Whats more, some are physically strong, but psychological problems are able to bring potential threats. Teaches may have a chance to find them in advance. Besides, specialists in this field are to be required to make full preparation for cases in time. Facing the crisis, experts can deal with it in a professional way, which means they have more or better opportunities to save us than others.

　　From the factors mentioned above, we may safely draw the conclusion that we can free ourselves from mental illness by taking certain precautions. For example, if you have pains or puzzles in mind, finding a friend to express these is a good way to release pressure. Certainly, there is little doubt that further attention will be paid to the issue.

　　Chance 　の　总结：

　　potential threats 潜在威胁

　　ease 减轻，舒缓

　　psychological problems 心理问题

　　precaution 预防措施

　　release pressure 释放压力

　　play an important/critical role in sth

　　it is widely accepted that

　　To begin with, Whats more, Besides,

　　From the factors mentioned above draw the conclusion that

　　等等均为经典模板句式!

　　附 2008年大学英语四六级评分标准：

　　33分--条理不清、思路紊乱，语言支离破碎或大部分句子均有错误，且多数为严重错误。

　　39分--基本切题。表达思想不清楚连贯性差。有较多严重的语言错误。

　　45分--基本切题。有些地方表达思想不够清楚，文字勉强连贯;语言错误相当多，其中有一些是严重错误。

　　57分--切题。表达思想清楚，文字连贯，但有少量语言错误。

　　67分--切题。表达思想清楚，文字通顺。连贯性较好，基本上无语言错误，仅有个别小错。

　　文字不足酌情扣分：100-119扣1分;90-99扣3分;80-89扣4分;70-79扣5分;60-69扣6分;50-59扣7分;不足50扣9分