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Nowadays, there has been a heated discussion as to the relationship between parents and children. Views on the topic vary greatly among people from different walks of life. Some believe that parents should spend more time with their children, but others consider it better to ask children to show more understanding towards their parents.
On one hand, I agree with the idea that as children, we should show more understanding and appreciate the love and life our parents have provided us with. Therefore, we could help our parents at home, say, share some of the housework. Furthermore, we could also tell them “I love you” every day to thank them. On the other hand, working parents are busy and have great pressure, so it is likely that they neglect their kids. Hence, to improve their relationship, parents could sit down and talk with their children, listen to their problems, help them and respect them.
However, from my perspective, this is not one man’s job. Both parents and children should work to understand each other. Thus, it is crucial to have effective communication. Only in this way can the relationship between parents and children be improved!
解析
文体:本次的作文是大家所熟悉的“议论文”,所以在文体上应该给了大家一颗定心丸,比今年6月份的应用文——广告——要容易写很多;
审题:其实题目中,最重要的一句话是:how to best handle the relationship between parents and children, 所以大家要好好思考一下这一句话就好了;这句话体现出的主题是“亲子关系”,体现的要求是需要一个“解决方法”,因为措辞用的是“how”,所以大家在写的时候,围绕“亲子关系”,给出“解决方法”就不会偏题了;
结构:议论文用三段论是最简单也最有效的。正如恒星网校的四六级课程里,一直给大家灌输的理念就是要“龙头凤尾,中间结构清晰”。也就是说,开头和结尾至少要用词准确,有吸引力,尤其是开头部分。因为开头是给改卷老师形成第一印象的重要位置,所以大家要保证开头的质量;结尾一段也是如此;而中间部分,有连接词展现段落的结构清晰,这篇文章在结构上就很清晰明了了。所以本文第一段,引入亲子关系的主题,第二段给出自己的解决方法,并说明原因,第三段进一步给出对于集体和对于个人的不同建议,思路就很清楚了