Yours Sincerely,
Li Ming
考研英语作文批改点评如下:
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my interest in your recent advertised position for a resident in your hospital. 【I appreciate this opportunity of working with you and other colleages(拼写错误). That well(will) be unforgetten(拼写错误)experience in my life.简单的说一下即可,毕竟人家连你的简历都没有看到还不能决定录不录用你】 I am sure that I qualified for the job. Firstly, enclosed with this letter is my resume which further detail(用第三人称单数details,它的主语是resume) my academic qualifications and previous work experience. I da(去掉)have learned solid theoretical knowledge in Medical Collage(不用大写,没有说明是哪个具体的学校) for 5 years and also worked as a(an) intern in Mercy West Hospital for 7 years. During this time, I actually have accumulated many a(去掉,后面的skills用的复数) practical clinical skills which would make me succeed in my future career. Secondly, not only do my qualifications and experience make me a perfece(拼写错误)candidate for it, my cheerful personality is well suited to working as a staff member. At the same time, I am also a teamworker(这不是一个词)that has been proved in my interns job. Last, I am a very friendly person who can establish rapport quickly with patient of all ages and provide the service which they really need as soon as possible. I would like to meet with you at your earlist(拼写错误)convenience to discuss the possibility of working in your hospital. Thank you for your consideration of my application. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours Sincerely, Li Ming 点评:5-6分太长。其实中间的内容很简单,1你的学历;2你的经历;3你的个人秉性。简单扼要的说明就可以了。
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