考研英语待批改作文:
Dear sir or madam,
Notiong your company is advertising for softerware designers, I can not stop myself from writing this letter to apply this offer.
I, called Li Ming, am an granduated of NanChang University. I am sure I am just the man your company is looking for. There are three reasons as follow. The first and foremost, I am major in Softerware Engineering. After four-year-learning of softerware designing, I can meet all of the knowledges and abilities which this position needs. Second,When I was a senior, I joined a software program, named SFEE, with my teacher. So I, who is not a newman any more, can solve a lot of problems during developing a softerware by myslef. the last but not least, I took a partime job as a network moderator of my universitys campus network for half a year, which gives me plenty of experience in network maintainance.
It is very nice of you to read my letter, and all the details can be see from the enclosed files. I look forward to your response.
yours,
Li Ming
考研英语作文批改点评如下:
Dear sir or madam,I, called Li Ming, am an(a)granduated(拼写错误) of NanChang(Nanjing) University. I am sure I am just the man your company is looking for. There are three reasons as follow. The first and foremost, I am major in Softerware(拼写错误)Engineering. After four-year-learning(four-year learning) of softerware(拼写错误) designing, I can meet all of the knowledges(拼写错误) and abilities which this position needs. Second, When(w小写) I was a senior, I joined a software program, named SFEE, with my teacher. So I, who is not a newman(new man分开写) any more, can solve a lot of problems during developing a softerware(拼写错误) by myslef(拼写错误). the last but not least, I took a partime(part-time)job as a network moderator of my universitys campus network for half a year, which gives me plenty of experience in network maintainance(拼写错误). It is very nice of you to read my letter, and all the details can be see(应该用过去分词seen) from the enclosed files. I look forward to your response.yours(Yours一般后加sincerely/truly等词),
Li Ming 点评:5分拼写错误比较多。语言需要更简练,更有条理。Notiong(拼写错误) your company is advertising for softerware (拼写错误)designers, I can not stop myself from writing this letter to apply(加介词for) this offer.
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