I am writting the letter to apply for the position that your website proximately said you need a school doctor who undergraduate medical graduate.
I would like to express my gratitude for you kind consoderation of my application . I look forword to hearing from you soon,
Yours sincerely ,
Li Ming
考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writting(拼写错误，writing) the letter to apply for the position that your website proximately said you need a school doctor who undergraduate medical graduate(这里表达的不好). I believe in(believe是相信，believe in是信任) that i(大写) will be appropriate for the job once you give me a chance. I am female who graduated from Medical University so i(大写) am not have the medically(这里用形容词) skill but also have patience and love that is inherent charavter(拼写错误)of female. Particularly, i(大写) have been work in a chlidren(拼写错误)hospital since i(大写) graduated, so i(大写) am experienced. Maybe the most thing(most important thing?) you concerned is why i(大写) quit the job in the hospital. 【The key is, to contrast shool(拼写错误), the doctor in hospital is too busy and tired to i(大写) take good care of my own chlidren(拼写错误),】(这个观点会让人认为也许你也因为累而辞去这份工作) I would like to express my gratitude for you(用所有格your) kind consoderation(拼写错误)of my application. I look forword(拼写错误)to hearing from you soon,(结尾用句号) Yours sincerely, Li Ming (落款位于右下角，两行内容不用离这么远) 点评：4-5分要简洁扼要的写出有助于你得到这份工作的内容。