I have learned from my friend Tom of your vacancy for a secretary, and am therefore writing to apply for the position.
I am confident that my academic training has prepared me to handle this job. To begin with, I have a good command of professional knowledge and can speak English fluently. In addition, I gained much experience in my previous work. With my qualification and ability, I am convinced that I will make satisfactory contribution towards development of your company.
Im looking foward to an interview at your convenience. Thank you for your consideration.
Yours Sincerely,
Li Ming
考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Sir or Madam, I have learned from my friend Tom of your vacancy for a secretary, and (建议加I)am therefore writing to apply for the position. I am confident that my academic training has prepared me to handle this job. To begin with, I have a good command of professional knowledge and (加I)can speak English fluently. In addition, I gained much experience in my previous work. With my qualification and ability, I am convinced that I will make satisfactory contribution towards (加定冠词the)development of your company. Im looking forward(拼写错误，forward) to an interview at your convenience. Thank you for your consideration. Yours Sincerely, Li Ming 点评：6分第二段的第二部分内容给人感觉很空旷，要让你的内容更加充实。