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考研英语看作文范例点评：追星族

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　　2015考研英语看图作文范例点评：追星族

　　写作原文

　　As is subtly portrayed in the drawing, the picture on the left illustrates a young boy wrote a famous football player name,Beckham , on his face, and the other picture on the right illustrates a young man who wants to have a hair style of Beckham and spends on 300RMB. These pictures illustratethe worship of star is popular in the modern society.There are some factors contribute to this phenomenon. The first factor that the ideology of young individuals in modern society is not independence . They do not know that what is worth to hold and what is they really want or need. The second factor that the atmosphere of the modern society is not verybenefit to the development of young folks. With the dissemination of TVs, magazines, and so forth, the environment of worship of star is increasing popularity. So it can influence young person always and everywhere.In my point of view, the preference of individual, there is no one right or wrong choice. Because various folks take different attitudes toward the phenomenon of worship, many may be like while other may not. But I deem, as college students, we should put our vigour on the learning rather than pursuing star.

　　总体点评

　　文章存在很多语法上的问题，尤其是比较细致的问题，还有标点符号运用有误，作者在完成习作后应认真检查，避免不必要的错误。此外，词汇量少，比如在第一段一直重复illustrate这个单词，平时可以多积累一些词汇，在运用的时候注意变换。句型也相对较为单一，多总结模仿经典句型，提高自己的写作水平，为自己的习作增彩。作者可以从大量熟读经典范文入手，积累知识，自己勤于练习。

　　参考分数：10

　　考研英语写作水平的提升是需要不断地练习，在改正错误中不断取得进步，不怕犯错误，怕明知道犯错误却不面对。希望广大考生切记。2015年，加油吧，冲击考研英语高分!

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