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考研英语看作文范例点评：男女失衡

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　　2015考研英语看图作文范例点评：男女失衡

　　写作原文

　　In the picture,there is an unbalanced seesaw on which the one side sitting a woman with her body shaking, and on the other side,15 men are going down on their knees asking the woman to marry them. The picture reveals the unbalancedsex ratio in our country. So what causes this phenomenon?In my opinion, there are mainly two reasons. First, the conception prefer sons to daughters is very popular in our country. Through it is not as intensive as in the old society, most parents,especially the ones in remote areas still want to have a son. Further more, along with the Birth control policy, some parents would choose to abandon their child when they know she is a girl.In order to solve this problem, various measures have to be adopted. As to the government, it should draw up laws to reinforce the punishment of abortion. As to the parents, they should change their prejudice to children, and build up the conception of It makes no differences if the baby is a girl or a boy. I think under the joint effort of the government and the individuals, the condition of unbalanced sex ratio will be improved in the near future.

　　总体点评

　　整体来说，文章写得不错;但还存在个别简单的语法错误。作者在写作完之后若可以花费几分钟时间来回读文章，便会减少不必要的错误。考研作文的整体思路你已经基本掌握，后面要做的就是多积累高分佳句，为自己的文章增彩;再者，写完之后一定要认真检查，减少失分点。

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