2015考研英语看图作文范例点评:拔苗助长
写作原文
As is vividly unfolded in the caricature,A little boy is required to finish reading a mass of books which are even higher than his height by his father,whose facial expression implies that he is rather unwilling and distressed.in the picture,there is a book called Early-MBA.genarally,It isread by adults.the drawer aims to reveal a symbolic meaning that parents should cultivate children according to his aptitude,instead of blind notion of education.In contemporary society,the number of students who suffer from cram school and the pressure of their parentshas increased at an alarming rate.Careful deliberation of this phenomenon has illustrated me on why this should be so.Fierce competition,in the first place,constitues one of the primary reasons.According to a recent survey made by sina,there are one million students choose to pursue a master degree after graduation.Attending cram school will lay a foundation for future development.Convergent thinking existing in the society is also the breeding ground for this trend.This undesirable general mood of society will eventually result in being devoid of innovation.If there is no compelling interference to revease this trend,our country is bound to be influenced adversely.To be specific,It will lack of innovative talent,be short of the motion to accelerate,and ultimately be detrimental to building up a suststainabledevelopment society.In terms of my personal experience,Itis urgent and imperative to take counter measures.For one thing, the public media should advocate and propagandize the notion of divergent thinking,which will be conducive to ones personal growth and core competitive power.For another,students should foster a desirable life philosophy.If we can implement as the above mentioned,the promising future can be well guaranteed.
总体点评
文章采用经典的三段式结构进行阐述,重点突出,条理清晰;但还存在一些简单的语法错误。作者在写作完之后若可以花费几分钟时间来回读文章,便会减少不必要的错误。考研作文的整体思路你已经基本掌握,后面要做的就是多积累高分佳句,加强句子成分的分析。可以结合《写作160篇》的指导,继续积累、练习、巩固、提高。相信你会取得不错的成绩的!再者,写完之后一定要认真检查,减少失分点。
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