大作文评语:
1、文章存在一些语法错误,影响得分,希望你以后注意,尤其是像形容词比较级这种错误切忌再犯。
2、首段图片描述段比较符合要求,简单地将图片内容做一个描述即可,三两句话就OK。但你的第二自然段意义引申段显得过于单薄了,首先是句式简单,没有亮点,让阅卷老师读起来平淡无奇。其次,你对道理的阐述也不深刻,仅是反复阐述同一个观点,就像我们写议论文一样,我们阐述一个观点最好要辅之以论据。因此,你在阐述cooperation如何important的时候一定要加入实例,可以是你生活中的例子,比如大家在考研的时候share辅导资料,也可以是大到整个国家有关的事情,比如全国人民齐心办奥运等等。这些都可以很好地体现合作的重要性。所以,你在第二段中一定要加入examples。
3、我们在第三自然段通常都会对讨论作一个总结或者是提一些建议措施,同样,如果能够以一个长句做结尾,就能够给阅卷老师以眼前一亮的感觉,分数自然就上去了。而你在文章中的结尾过于简单,如能加入一些名言名句最好,如unity is strength等等。 总的说来,你这篇文章写得比较仓促。但这毕竟是我们练习的第一篇作文,希望你经过一段时间的复习之后能够有所提高。
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