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Dear Sales Manager,
I am a senior in the Computer Science Department of Fudan University. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about this book Practical Writing for NETEM bought in your bookstore last week.
The reason for my dissatisfaction is to exert amount of the obvious faults in this book. In the fist place, the explanation and analysis about the portion of reading comprehension is shown as uncertain to cause easily some mistakes in my mind. In addition, owing to not follow the standard form in print, the words and sentences can not be clearly identified. Under these circumstances, I find it worse to waste my valuable time and energy
I appreciate it very much if you could be returned this book, preferably refund me the money, and I would like to have this matter settled within seven days.
Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
考研英语作文批改点评如下:
Dear Sales Manager,
I am a senior in the Computer Science Department of Fudan University. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about this book Practical Writing for NETEM bought in your bookstore last week.
The reason for my dissatisfaction is to exert(改为 there are a)amount of the obvious faults in this book. In the fist(拼写错误,改为 first) place, the explanation and analysis about the portion of(删除 the portion of ) reading comprehension is shown as uncertain to cause easily some mistakes in my mind. In addition, owing to not follow the standard form in print, the words and sentences can not be clearly identified. Under these circumstances, I find it worse to waste my valuable time and energy(这句话没写完,后面还要加上to do ).
I appreciate it very much if you could be returned this book, preferably refund me the money, and I would like to have this matter settled within seven days.
Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
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