考研英语待批改作文:
5-7分
第四篇
Dear Sir ,
I am a customer of your store. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about a box of pen that I bought it from yours.
The reason for my dissatisfaction is the quality of the pens is bad. In the first place,I found there is less two pens when I opened the box. In addition,a pen was broken and it didnt work. Under these circumstances, I find it very to your store.
I appreciate it very much if you could give me there pens,preferably replace the whole box,and I would like to have this matter settled by one day.
Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
考研英语作文批改点评如下:
Dear Sir ,
I am a customer of your store. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about a box of pen that I bought it(删除)from yours.
The reason for my dissatisfaction is the quality of the pens is bad(删除). In the first place,I found there is less two pens when I opened the box(不用there be 句型,可改为I found the box lacked of 2 pens when I opened it). In addition,a pen was broken and it didnt work. Under these circumstances, I find it very to your store.
I appreciate it very much if you could give me there pens,preferably replace the whole box,and I would like to have this matter settled by(因为后面加的是具体时间,因此这里改为in) one day.
Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
5分
同学你好,考研小作文的字数要求是100词,不要超过太多,考试时间很紧张,把过多的时间用在写小作文上是不合理的。小作文字数已经很少了,因此尽量要避免出现整句错误。
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