2014中考英语写作提升周周练+范文精讲(1)

作文练习一：

学校的英语报就争做校园环保小卫士话题征文，请你投稿。谈谈你平时的

具体做法、你的感受以及建议。

提示词语：environment , collect bottles, turn off, duty, make a real difference, should

One possible version:

Good environment is important for everyone. To help with it, I pick up the litter when I see it on the floor. Besides, I always collect bottles and I never forget to turn off the lights when I leave the classroom.

As students, I think its our duty to protect the environment of our school. And even the simplest activities can make a real difference to the environment. So I suggest we should reuse books as long as possible. And its also a good idea to take part in recycling programmes.

I hope everyone will care about the environment. I believe we can make our school more and more beautiful.

范文讲解：

审题要点：具体做法，感受，建议。

开篇首先要点出话题：Good environment is important for everyone.

句式提升：Can you imagine what the school would be if it was full of rubbish?

一. 具体做法：To help with it, I pick up the litter when I see it on the floor. Besides,

I always collect bottles and I never forget to turn off the lights when I leave the

classroom.

点评：1.具体做法最好写上三点，三点之间要有过渡。过渡不要频繁使用 first，

second，third。这篇文章处理的很好，to help with it, Besides, and

2. 注意从句的运用，比如时间状语从句，定语从句等。

句式提升：可以加入非限定性定语从句，解释具体的做法后会有什么效果。

二.感受： As students, I think its our duty to protect the environment of our school.

And even the simplest activities can make a real difference to the environment.

点评：感受要说出来为什么要保护环境，和保护环境的意义。

高级句式：It is our duty to do sth. The simplest activities can make a real difference

to.

三.建议：So I suggest we should reuse books as long as possible. And its also a good idea to take part in recycling programmes.

点评：建议可以同样写上三点，句式可以更加多变些。

结尾要总结：I hope everyone will care about the environment. I believe we can make

our school more and more beautiful.

句式提升：As long as everyone makes contributions to the program, no matter how

small, it will make a great difference. Both our school and our life will be more and

more beautiful.

评分标准：

第一档：(15~13 分)

完全符合题目要求，观点正确，要点齐全。句式多样，词汇丰富。语言

准确，语意连贯，表达清楚，具有逻辑性。

第二档：(12~9 分)

基本符合题目要求，观点正确，要点齐全。语法结构和词汇基本满足文

章需要。语言基本通顺，语意基本连贯，表达基本清楚。虽然有少量语

言错误，但不影响整体理解。

第三档：(8~5 分)

部分内容符合题目要求，要点不齐全。语法结构和词汇错误较多，语言

不通顺，表达不够清楚，影响整体理解。

第四档：(4~0 分)

与题目有关内容不多，只是简单拼凑提示词语，所写内容难以理解。