在自然中生活

“江南可采莲，莲叶何田田。”是否你总幻想着乘一叶小楫轻舟，在半人高的荷叶中穿行。让双手优雅地抚过带着露珠的莲蓬，深吸一口，那股清香便已让你沉醉。

"You can pick lotus in the south of the Yangtze River. Where is the lotus leaf?" Whether you always fantasize about taking a small boat to walk in the lotus leaf which is half human height. Let your hands caress the lotus with dewdrops gracefully, take a deep breath, and the fragrance will make you intoxicated.

“明月松间照，清泉石上流。”是否你总向往着能在一个宁静的月夜，独自漫步于松林中，泉水叮咚是内心的旋律，诗情画意的时间在此刻为你停留。

"The moon shines among the pines, and the clear spring stone flows upward." Whether you always yearn to be able to walk alone in the pine forest on a quiet moonlit night, the spring is the inner melody, the poetic time stays for you at this moment.

而残酷的现实总将你从梦想中唤醒，你身陷于这喧嚣的都市中，何处才是自然？但不必惆怅更不必悲戚，闭上双眼，听听灵魂的声音。城市的躯壳挡不住向往自然的心，只要有了一颗善感而自然的心，这个城市便会披上一层茸茸的绿意。

And the cruel reality always wakes you up from your dream. You are trapped in this noisy city. Where is nature? But there's no need to be sad or sad. Close your eyes and listen to the voice of your soul. The body of the city can't stop the yearning for nature. As long as there is a kind and natural heart, the city will be covered with a layer of fuzzy green.

清晨，走在路上。岸边的柳树，在风中轻轻地抚摸着微微颤动的水面，却没有一毫柳絮的飘飞，大概他们早已在春风中飞尽了吧。在匆忙的脚步中，我们不知错过了多少生命中的美好。为何不抬头望望天边呢？柔美的朝霞是仙女遗落的霓裳，金色的阳光正透过薄雾向你微笑。阳光打着卷，慵懒地躺在树叶上，让那翠绿的血液闪着诱人的光。刹那间，都市在你眼中融化了，一栋栋高楼仿佛成为了热带雨林中的棵棵参天大树，耳旁不绝的车鸣变成了鸟儿的悦耳歌唱。你在参天古木中漫步，而阳光轻轻把你围绕。原来，在自然中生活只需一刹那的感动。

In the morning, walking on the road. The willow trees on the bank gently caress the slightly quivering water surface in the wind, but there is no catkins flying. Maybe they have already flown out in the spring wind. In the rush of steps, we don't know how much we miss in life. Why don't you look up at the horizon? The soft morning glow is the fairy's lost neon clothes. The golden sunshine is smiling at you through the mist. The sun rolled and lay lazily on the leaves, making the green blood shining with attractive light. In a flash, the city melts in your eyes. Tall buildings seem to be the towering trees in the rainforest. The incessant sound of cars beside your ears becomes the sweet song of birds. You walk among the towering ancient trees, and the sun gently surrounds you. It turns out that living in nature only needs a moment's touch.

连绵不绝的雨丝让计划好的周末泡了汤，你靠在窗边百无聊赖地打发时间。这时一颗调皮的雨珠从它浩浩荡荡的队伍中逃了出来，在你手臂上溅起一朵晶莹的小花，你抬起头望着烟雨朦胧，恍惚间如置身于江南小巷中，撑着油纸伞默默前行。走过一片池塘，雨连成了线，在水面上打出一个又一个圆圈；一只小小的青蛙坐在荷叶上，静静地看着这生命的流逝。多情的流水正从你脚边绕过，不远处，一朵红莲开得正盛，微风拂过，它一低头的温柔深深打动了你的心。突然就觉得心中一片开阔，这自然中的生活，如此美好!虽然你仍身在这都市里，但你的心又在大自然里做了一次深呼吸。原来，在自然中生活，只需一颗诗意的心。

The continuous rain made the planned weekend soaked in soup, and you spent your time idly by the window. At this time, a mischievous raindrop escapes from its mighty team, splashing a crystal flower on your arm, and you look up at the misty rain, trance like being in a lane in the south of the Yangtze River, holding an oil paper umbrella and moving silently. Walking through a pond, the rain formed a line, making circles on the water; a small frog sat on the lotus leaf and watched the life pass quietly. The passionate water is bypassing your feet. Not far away, a red lotus is blooming, and the breeze is blowing. The tenderness of its bow deeply touches your heart. Suddenly I feel open in my heart. Life in nature is so beautiful! Although you are still in the city, your heart takes a deep breath in nature again. It turns out that living in nature requires only a poetic heart.

把自然收藏于胸，这个都市里便处处弥漫了自然的呼吸。

The collection of nature in the chest, the city will be filled with natural breath.

【名师点评】

[comments on famous teachers]

这个作文题目生活化味很浓，要求考生从自己的生活感悟出发来写作。本文就是这方面的典型。

This composition topic has a strong sense of life, which requires the examinees to write from their own life perception. This paper is a typical example of this.

本文取材于考生自己的生活体验，立足于自我感怀，所选材料都来自考生自己的生活体验和感悟，且情景渲染细腻真切。作者多种修辞手法的运用使景物描写活灵活现，将作者的感情、体验融入其中。“多情的流水正从你脚边绕过，不远处，一朵红莲开得正盛，微风拂过，它一低头的温柔深深打动了你的心”，读着这样的文字，也随着作者一起体验到了在大自然生活的绿意。

This paper is based on the examinee's own life experience and self feelings. All the selected materials are from the examinee's own life experience and perception, and the scene rendering is delicate and true. The use of various rhetorical devices of the author makes the description of scenery vivid, and integrates the author's feelings and experience into it. "The passionate water is bypassing from your feet, not far away, a red lotus is blooming, the breeze is blowing, its gentle bow deeply touched your heart". Reading such words, we also experience the green meaning of living in nature together with the author.

文章写了两个生活场景：一是清晨，走在路上，将眼中所见之自然美景，与现实生活中的都市生活进行对比，诠释了“在自然中生活只需一刹那的感动”的内涵；一是周末，下雨靠在窗边看雨中景色，感悟到了“在自然中生活，只需一颗诗意的心”的话题内涵。两幅精美的画面，情与景融合在一起。这两个极富诗情画意的场景，有力地揭示了文章的观念——只要有了一颗善感而自然的心，这个城市便会披上一层茸茸的绿意，从而扣住题目，使文章中心鲜明。(罗胤)

The article writes two life scenes: one is to walk on the road in the morning, compare the natural beauty seen in the eyes with the urban life in real life, and interpret the connotation of "living in nature only needs a moment's touch"; the other is to watch the rain scenery by the window at the weekend, and realize the topic connotation of "living in nature only needs a poetic heart". Two beautiful pictures, feeling and scenery are integrated together. These two poetic and picturesque scenes effectively reveal the concept of the article - as long as there is a kind and natural heart, the city will be covered with a layer of fuzzy green, so as to catch the title and make the article center distinct. (Luo Yin)