谁出事了？

漫画描绘了大街上一个小孩子踩到西瓜皮摔了一跤，小孩子坐在地上迷茫看着分别代表家庭、学校、社会的三个人——他们关切而又警惕地说：“出事了吧！”这样一幅场景，作为一个孩子，看了这幅漫画自然认同地笑了：家庭、学校、社会常常给予现在的独生子女们过多、过分的关心和夸大、不切实际的、不必要的教育与指责。

The cartoon depicts a child in the street stepping on the watermelon skin and falling. The child sits on the ground confused and looks at the three people who represent the family, school and society respectively. They say with concern and vigilance, "something happened!" Such a scene, as a child, naturally laughs with approval after reading this cartoon: the family, school and society often give too much, too much concern and exaggeration, unrealistic and unnecessary education and criticism to the only child now.

现在大多数家庭只有一个孩子，两个家长甚至祖父母辈关注、教育着一个独苗，除了溺爱问题、孩子交往能力问题、孩子自我心理问题，还导致了漫画中过分、夸大的教育问题。仅仅摔了一跤，或者生活中出现的小磕小碰和一些小挫折，三方面的教育者便以“不听老人言”的说教者姿态围住孩子，孩子既失去了自己反省错误、总结教训的机会，也失去了独立地、勇敢地自己爬起来的机会。

At present, most families only have one child. Two parents or even grandparents pay attention to and educate a single child. In addition to the problem of doting, the problem of children's communication ability, the problem of children's self psychology, it also leads to excessive and exaggerated education problems in comics. Only a fall, or a small bump and some small setbacks in life, the educators in three aspects surround the children with the preacher attitude of "not listening to the old man's words". The children not only lose the opportunity to reflect on their mistakes, summarize their lessons, but also lose the opportunity to stand up independently and bravely.

有一个熟悉的报道，美国的小孩子在玩耍时不慎摔倒，孩子痛得龇牙咧嘴，忍不住哭起来，高大的父亲站在一边，微笑着鼓励儿子自己爬起来，孩子于是含着泪花爬起来。而一位中国父亲在对待类似的事情时，都会大声地喝斥孩子不听话到处乱跑，“出事了吧！”然后抱起孩子。

There is a familiar report that children in the United States stumble when they are playing. The children show their teeth and can't help crying. The tall father stands aside and encourages his son to get up with a smile. The child then gets up with tears. When a Chinese father treats similar things, he will loudly scold his children for not obeying and running around, "what happened!" Then pick up the baby.

日本的经济起飞重要的一点是靠教育、培养人才。中国的教育同样提出了人才强国的战略。近年来，中国高度关注教育问题，大付出大投入我国教育。然而这则漫画表现的问题给我们敲响了警钟：同样是关注教育，我们的“关注”是否存在问题？

Japan's economic take-off depends on education and training of talents. China's education also puts forward the strategy of strengthening the country with talents. In recent years, China has paid great attention to education and invested a lot in it. However, the problem of the cartoon performance gives us a wake-up call: it is also concerned about education. Is there any problem in our "concern"?

教育者过多过分的关注、不必要的指责让孩子少了磨砺锻炼的机会，少了培养自己处理问题能力的机会，少了独立战胜挫折的机会。这必然会导致畸形的人才和人格的不健全。所谓“穷人的孩子早当家”，就是穷人的孩子有更多的锻炼自己的机会。“感动中国人物”洪战辉正是靠自己打拼磨砺才走出自己的人生之路，他必然比富人家孩子和“关注”下孩子更见人的品性。

The excessive attention and unnecessary accusations of educators have reduced the opportunities for children to hone and exercise, to develop their ability to deal with problems, and to overcome setbacks independently. This will inevitably lead to the deformity of talent and personality. The so-called "children of the poor are in charge early", that is, children of the poor have more opportunities to exercise themselves. Hong Zhanhui, who is "touched by Chinese characters", is just going out of his life by his own hard work. He must be more sensible than the children of rich families and the children under "concern".

中国富裕起来了，中国这个“富人家”的孩子该怎样教育？

China has become rich. How to educate the children of the "rich family"?

不禁要问：谁出事了？孩子？教育？

Can't help but ask: who happened? Children? Education?

【亮点透析】

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基础等级切合题意

Basic level is suitable for the topic

文章对漫画的主题把握十分准确，通过细致观察，提炼出主题——家庭、学校、社会常常给予现在的独生子女们过多、过分的关心和夸大、不切实际的、不必要的教育与指责。

This paper holds the theme of comics very accurately. Through careful observation, the theme - family, school and society often give too much, too much concern and exaggeration, unrealistic and unnecessary education and criticism to the only child now.

内容充实文章围绕主题选择素材，中国、美国、日本以及洪战辉等事例的运用充实了内容。

Content enrichment the article selects materials around the theme, and the use of examples such as China, the United States, Japan and Hong Zhanhui enriches the content.

发展等级深刻

Profound development level

透过现象深入本质

Go deep into the essence through the phenomenon

漫画作文难在透过画面看到其中的生活道理或哲理，本文做得很好。并且能结合学校、家庭、社会三方面辩证地看问题，很深刻。

It's hard to see the truth of life or philosophy in cartoon composition through the picture. This paper does well. And can combine school, family, society to see the problem dialectically, very deep.

现场评分：内容20分+表达19分+发展19分=58分

On site score: content 20 points + expression 19 points + development 19 points = 58 points