湖南省长沙县实验中学2016届高三英语二轮复习书面表达复习重点话题指导专题11 青少年成长话题指导（教师版）

　　【写作任务】

　　青少年也有很多属于自己的小秘密。家长们应允许他们保留一些私人空间。请根据下表写——篇短文，指出家长的一些错误做法，并给这样的家长提一些建议，使家长和孩子更好的交流。词数：120--150。

　　【思路指导】

　　1．思路点拨：

　　审题第—步：确定文体、人称，这是一篇说理议论文，应以第三人称为主；

　　审题第二步：确定全文论点。从信息提示来看，全文的中心应是批评家长的这些错误做法并且给这样的家长提建议；

　　审题第三步：确定写作要点。

　　2．选词、造句：

　　①交流产生困难

　　have some difficulty in communicating

　　②偷看孩子日记

　　peep at their children's diaries

　　③不敲门就进入孩子房间

　　walk into their children's rooms without knocking

　　④私自查看孩子书包

　　look

　　through

　　children's

　　schoolbags without permission

　　【参考范文】

　　Now

　　some

　　parents

　　have

　　some

　　difficulty

　　in communicating with their children．

　　Children can't understand what their parents have done．Some parents peep at their children's diaries：some walk into their children's rooms without knocking；some：look through their schoolbags without permission：others read letters sent to their children．Are these really good ideas? We are afraid not．Parents should know they ale no longer little

　　To learn more about：their children，parents should remember what they did at the same age．And the most：important：thing is that：

　　parents

　　should

　　give

　　them respect

　　；and understanding．

　　实例指导2—独生子女

　　【写作任务】

　　自从我国实行一对夫妇只生一个孩子的计划育政策以来，很多家庭都是独生子女，孩子娇生养，在家吃啥有啥，穿啥买啥而且都是名牌。请写一篇120—150词的英语短文来阐述一下一对夫只生一个孩子的利与弊、

　　有利于培养学生的创新意识，同时也要求考生必须要思维活跃开善于发散思维，近几年此题型常考的文体有两种：记叙文和议论文。记叙丈就是要求考生根据给的材料，展．开充分的想象，拓展原材料，把整个事情表达清楚。而议论文要求考生对所给的材料进行分析，然后发表自己的观点或看法。

　　突破开放性作文的方法如下：

　　1、认真审题，确定要素。根据所提供的材料，确定情景及体裁，找出关键词，并选用正确的人称和时态。相对而言，人称比较灵活，考生应根据具体的材料来确定。拿本篇写作任务来说，所给材料已经明确给出主题——一对夫妇只生一个孩子的利与弊。从主题来看以第三人称写一篇议论文比交好。时态采用一般现在时为好。

　　2、合理想象，草拟用语。根据材料和关键词，发散思维，考生应尽可能运用自己熟悉的单词、短语或句型来灵活表达，避免单词、短语或句型等的重复使用。如本写作任务中，我们可能用到下列单词、短语：one couple，one child，advantages and disadvantages，single children，time and attention , the only child , spoil , finacial burden , lonely , communiacte , interact等：

　　3、展示细节，组句成篇。通过审题和找好关键词后，下一步要考虑如何安排已经选定的这些材料，要将自己心中所设想的材料拟一个提纲，梳理清楚先后顺序，根据相应的词语和句型，展开细节描写。这样写起来就会有条不紊、条理清楚、详略得当，使得所写的文章中心突出、就本写作任务的内容指导如下：本丈要求围绕一对夫女，只生一个孩子的利与弊进行写作，我们可以分三部分来写：第一部分：通过一对夫妇只生一个孩子引出自己的观点——一对夫妇只生一个孩子有利有弊。第二部分：分别介绍一对夫妇只生一个孩子的利与弊，我们可从以下几个方面来考虑：①一对夫女；只生一个孩子有利于父母更好地关心照顾孩子，为孩子提供有质量的服务，然而父母这样做要把握好度，过度的话就会对孩子溺爱。②减轻了他们的经济负担，另外，一对夫妇只生一个孩子容易造成孩子的孤独和不能很好的跟别人吏往等问题。③总结再次阐明自己的观点，做到首尾呼应。

　　最后，要注意合理地分段，注意标点符号的应用、语言要流畅，上下丈过渡要自然。

　　[【学生习作】

　　them more dependent on their parents. For another, this can reduce the financial burdens of the family.

　　However, there seems to have some other problems. Having only one child can lead to the child's loneliness, especially during vacations. What's worse,

　　this may leave the child less able m interact well with people of his or her own age.

　　【教师点评】

　　文章的亮点在于：

　　1．恰当使用过渡词：For one thing …for another，therefore，however，What’s worse等的使用使语意连贯，衔接自然。

　　2．表达自己观点时用到了personally , I hold the view that …被动句single children may be more spoiled，原因状语从句、定语从句、动名词复合结构以及1eave+宾语+宾语补足语leave the child less able m interact well with people of his or her own age.等的应用在一定程度上体现作者较为深厚的语言功底，同时又十分自然。

　　但文章也存在不足之处：

　　1．有明显的语法错误，如：第二段中的非限制性定语从句which make them more dependent on their parents.中的make应改为makes，因为which代替的是前面的整个情况。又如：第三段开头句子there seems to have some other problems这是there be句型的变型，所以have应改为be。

　　2．文章结束得太突然，使读者读起来感觉好像后面还有内容，最好再做个总结。

　　实例指导3－交友

　　【写作任务】

　　假设你叫王华，你的笔友李君来信询问关于如何交友的问题。请根据下面的汉语提示， 结合自身实际，给他写一封回信。内容包括： 1. 交友的重要性； 2. 如何交友：至少提三条建议； 3. 患难朋友才是真朋友。 词数要求：120-150。 【思路指导】

　　1. 仔细审题：在历年高考中，英语试题中的书面表达题考查最多的应用文为书信形式。而内容有很多又是关于很多疑惑问题的请教或解答。本文写作的中心是围绕“如何交友”这个主题来展开，属于议论文范畴，所以应该使用一般现在时态来表述观点，人称上应以第一人称为主。

　　2. 提炼要点：

　　实际上，本篇习作的要点主要体现在在如何交友上，为此你要通过具体的建议进行说明你的想法和建议。通过对作文要点的分析，更有利于我们设计文章的整体结构。

　　3. 理清层次：

　　由于是说理性文章，脉络一定要清晰，使人一幕了然，说服性强。为了保证层次间在意义上的连贯以及自然的过渡，适量衔接词的使用在本文的写作中是必不可少的。

　　4. 谋篇布局：

　　由于本文属于一篇带有劝勉性质的说理性文章，因此要用过渡词将上下文的逻辑关系体现出来。需要注意的是：使用上述过渡性词必须根据上下文需要的原则，力求自然，决不可牵强附会，让人感觉别扭。还要注意用浅显易懂的语言，通俗形象的文字表述，表述要客观准确、严谨，不能随意发挥。

　　【遣词造句】

　　【学习习作】

　　Dear Li Jun ,

　　Glad to hear from you . Now I’m writing to discuss with you about how to make good friends.

　　As you know , everybody needs friends, so how to make true friends is very important to anybody. In my opinion, to make friends, the most important thing is that you must be friendly to others. Smile at others and you are always sure to get a smile in return. Besides, never judge a person only by his appearance. What’s more, you should think more of others than of yourself.

　　On the other hand, if you don’t agree with others on a certain matter, don’t argue but discuss with him. Always remember, a true friend is the one that is coming in the door while everyone else is going out, as the saying goes, “A friend in need is a friend indeed”.                                 

　　Yours faithfully                                 

　　Wang Hua 下水试游

　　仿照范文中的句子，将下列汉语译成英文。

　　1. 为了早晨睡得晚些，鲍勃关上了闹钟。

　　2. 正如大家所知，地球围绕太阳转。

　　3. 如何穿过那个峡谷仍然是个难题。

　　4 .麻烦是我把他的地址丢了。

　　5. 她讲英语比我多。

　　6. 如果他找到了，他会送来的。

　　7. 因为暴风雪，所有航班都被取消了，于是许多乘客只好乘火车。

　　4 .The trouble is that I have lost his address.

　　5. She speaks more English than I do.

　　6. If he has found it, he will send it.

　　7. All flights have been put off

　　because of the snowstorm , so many passengers could do nothing but take the train.

　　实例指导4----Parents and Children

　　【写作任务】

　　某英语报社开展以“Parents and Children'’为题的“看图作文”征文活动，要求根据以下三幅图用英语写一篇作文，文章内容应包括：①4月9日发生在李华家的事情；②你个人的感受。请你写一篇向报社投稿的征文。

　　注意：

　　1．词数100左右，征文题目已给出，不计入总数；

　　2．短文要求观点明确，结构合理，紧凑连贯。

　　【学生习作】

　　Parents and Children

　　In the evening of April 9,1 Li Hua was watching TV when his mother was busy preparing supper.2 Li Hua was so hungry that he began to complain about his mother’s slow.3 At that time, the telephone rang. She was a friend of her mother.4 She said to Li Hua today was his mother’s birthday. She wished her mother a good birthday. What a shame! Li Hua has forgot all about it.5He cares himself more than his mother.

　　At the story, I got deeply shocked. It is not easy for parents to bring us up.6 They give us

　　lots of love and care, while we don't care for them enough. Now it's never too late to realizethis and show our love

　　【作文示范】

　　On the evening of April 9th, Li Hua was watching TV while his mother was busy preparing

　　for dinner in the kitchen. How attentive he was watching the TV program when the telephone

　　rang. It was from a friend of his mother's, who wanted to say HAPPY BIRTHDAY to his

　　mother. "Today is my mother's birthday?" Li Hua was a little puzzled. "How come that I have

　　forgotten all about it?" Li Hua thought to himself, feeling ashamed.

　　At the story, I got deeply shocked. It is not easy for parents to bring us up. They give us

　　lots of love and care, while we don't care for them enough. Now it's never too late to realize

　　this and show our love and care for them.

　　实战演练

　　假如你是一名高二的学生，名叫王宁，最近你很不开心，因为你和父母之间有一些争执。你想告诉

　　你远在英国的笔友Tom。根据以下提示的内容写一封书信，告诉Tom你的成长烦恼。

　　1．我的数学和语文学得很好，但是觉得英语和物理比较难。可父母却觉得我每门功课都应该是班级哩最好的。

　　2．他们不尊重我，经常看我得日记。我放学回来晚了他们也很生气。

　　3．我喜欢流行音乐，周末也想看电视。而父母除了学习什么也禁止我做。

　　4．现在我对学习都不感兴趣了，请告诉我怎么办？

　　注意： 词数：120左右。

　　Dear Tom.

　　These

　　days, I

　　feel

　　upset, because I don't know how I can get ong well with my parents.

　　At school I am good at maths and Chinese, while I find English and physics difficult to learn. But my parents think I should always do best in every subject.

　　Besides, they don't trust me at all . They often read, my diary, and whenever I come back late, they get very angry.

　　You know I like popular music very much, and when weekends come, am dying to watchffV for a while. However, I am forbidden to do anything except studying.

　　Now I am no longer interested in my study. 1 don't know how I can I ipmve it. Can you give me some advice?

　　Yours,

　　Wang Ning

　　b．多做有氧运动(aerobic exercise)，如：散步、游泳、掎车、跳舞等。

　　注意：

　　1．词数：120—150；

　　2．可以适当增添细节，以使文章连贯。

　　How to Keep Ourselves Fit

　　Now students' health is a common concern.

　　High

　　school

　　students

　　bear much

　　pressure

　　with

　　heavy

　　loads

　　of school work and a fierce competition in the College Entrance Examination. And obesity

　　is

　　increasing

　　in

　　our

　　society because

　　of

　　unbalanced

　　diet

　　and nutrition.

　　Some

　　students

　　don't eat breakfast or are particular about food.

　　Another more serious problem is that some high school students in our country are obese or overweight, which can seriously affect our health. Obesity may contribute to other diseases, such as high

　　blood

　　pressure

　　and

　　heart disease.

　　So, as students, we should eat a balanced and nutritious diet. We should eat more vegetables and fruits. Besides, we should

　　have

　　proper

　　exercises, especially aerobic exercises .Walking ,swimming, cycling, and dancing are all examples of aerobic exercise.

　　持续火爆的“中国好声音”比赛成为当今人们谈论的一大时髦话题。假定你是李平，你们班就“超女”现象进行了一场讨论，以下是讨论结果。请你用英文给一家英文杂志社写一封信，把你们班的讨论结果反映给报社编辑。

　　所占比例 理由

　　赞成者

　　62% 1、为有歌唱才华的女孩子提供展示自我的机会；

　　2、让新歌手得到锻炼和培养，促进音乐的发展；

　　3、增强他们的竞争意识。

　　反对者

　　38% 1、许多学生因报名而花费大量时间和精力。

　　2、让一些学生产生一夜成名的想法，不集中精力学习；

　　3、误导某些学生盲目崇拜偶像。

　　你的看法

　　———

　　注意：1、词数100左右，开头为你写好。

　　2、可适当增减细节，以使行文连贯。

　　3、参考词汇：促进promote

　　崇拜 worship

　　偶像 idol

　　Dear editor,

　　Our class has recently held a heated discussion about the “Super Girls” phenomenon which was hot new in 2012. The students show their different opinions about it. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

　　Yours,

　　Li Ping

　　调查结果

　　原因

　　63％感觉幸福 1、生活水平提高了，可以想买什么就买什么。

　　2、科学技术的发展给人们带来各种各样的娱乐形式。

　　31％感觉不幸福 1、学习压力大，精神紧张。

　　2、几乎没有时间娱乐和休息。

　　6％觉得很难说

　　请你就调查结果写一篇短文，向《英语测试报》投稿。词数：120－150

　　Recently, a survey about whether you are happy was carried out by a new-formed group in our class. Hundreds of students were interviewed and we got various responses to our questions. The results are as follows.

　　The majority, that is to say, about 63% of them have a belief that they live a happy life. One of the reasons is that as a result of high living standard, we can buy whatever we want or need. Furthermore, more and more technologies bring various forms of entertainment, which make them relaxed in a short time.

　　While about one out of three think they are unhappy. In their opinion, too much pressure makes them nervous. Homework and studying occupy so much time that they have little time to enjoy themselves.

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　　Nowadays, many students in our school are crazy about losing weight. Some of them eat very little while others exercise all day. In my opinion, the best way to lose weight is to keep a healthy diet and do regular exercise. Firstly, we should say goodbye to junk food and snacks and try to eat more fruit and vegetables. But remember not to eat too little, or you’ll get sick very soon. Secondly, we shouldn’t spend too much time lying on our sofas or in beds. We should try to do more sports, such as swimming, skating, running and playing basketball. Last but not least, it’s wise to make a reasonable timetable for your exercise and study. In a word, having a good diet and exercising will surely make you fit and charming!

　　  武汉市曾经举行了学生穿汉代服饰的成人仪式。500多名18至20岁的学生身着汉代服饰,在编钟鼓乐声中庄严地完成"升国旗"、"加冠"、"拜师长"、"拜父母"和"成人宣誓"等仪式

　　武汉市将每年的5月16日定为"武汉市18岁成人节"。请你写一篇130词左右的作文对此发表你的看法。

　　Coming of Age Ceremony

　　Wuhan city once held a very special Coming of Age Ceremony, in which more than 500 students, wearing clothes from the Han Dynasty, performed a series of designed actions in ancient music.     In my opinion, the Coming of Age Ceremony is quite important, but I don’t agree that such a special ceremony by Wuhan city should be held. For one thing, I think wearing Han Dynasty clothing has nothing to do with this ceremony. For another thing the whole process makes students feel as if they were acting in a movie, and that reduces the solemnity of this ceremony.     In conclusion, I think the most appropriate way to celebrate it is to take an oath and to allow ourselves to be organized by the Communist Youth League to do good things and help people in need.