湖南省长沙县实验中学2016届高三英语二轮复习书面表达复习重点话题指导专题10 旅游探险类话题指导（教师版）

　　【写作任务】

　　根据下列图表的提示，写一篇你在意大利罗马旅游观光的日记。

　　注意：词数为120――150。

　　2)向式结构。为使用有限的文字描述美丽的景点，也为了提高表达的质量，写作过程中要尽量多地使用复杂的句式结构，如：

　　1. 用含有时间状语从句的复合句表达“抵达地点以及感受”：I was attracted by the beauty of the city the moment we arrived the there at 7 o’clock in the morning by plane．

　　2. 用过去分词短语作状语，表达地点，并用定语从句补充说明其悠久的历史：Situated in the middle of the Italia Peninsula , Rome is well known for its cultural relics which have been there for a long history of 2，500 years．

　　用定语从句补充说明参观景点后的感受和收获：In the morning we visited' Museo Nazionale Romano, where I enjoyed many precious and beautiful sculptures.以及we had a chance to visit the symbol of Rome, Colosseo, which is very beautiful in the setting sun.等。

　　3)篇章结构中的过渡与衔接词语。如：therefore，first ，then , finally , but等。

　　【学生习作】

　　May 1 st

　　Friday

　　Sunny

　　【教师点评】

　　1．亮点点击：该习作除了表达信息全面，语言准确之外，最突出的是篇章结构的安书。

　　文章介绍了到达地点和旅行方式后，接着介绍其地理位置和悠久的历史，，并描述了旅游业方面的突出成就：吸引着世界各地的游客来度假，尤其是春天，并把气候穿插其中。

　　接下来介绍旅游景点时，做到了言简意赅，用时间作为连接词语，层次分明，再用定语从句描述自【参考范文】

　　May 1st

　　Friday

　　Sunn3

　　Today I paid a visit to one of the oldest cities in Europe, Rome in Italw I was attracted by the beauty:of the city the moment we arrived here at 7 o'clock in the morning by plane. Situated in the middle of the Italia Peninsula, Rome is well known for its cultural relics which have been there for a long history of 2. 500 years. Therefore, many tourists from all over the world would prefer to spend their holiday here, espe:ially in warm spring.

　　In the morning we visited' Museo Nazionale Romano, where I enjoyed many precious and beautiful sculptures. Then we went to enjoy the splendid building, of Triumphal Arch in the afternoon. Nearly at dark, we had a chance to visit the symbol of Rome, Colosseo, which is very beautiful in the setting sun.

　　It was time for us to leave for another city, but I really think that Rome is well worth

　　a second visit offe day in the future.

　　for a long history of 2.500 years.

　　4. Nearly at dark, we had a chance to visit the symbol of Rome, Colosseo, which is very beautiful in the setting sun.

　　实例指导2--- 四川名胜

　　【写作任务】

　　你的英语老师在上课时样你们准备介绍中国的某个省份的旅游景点。你放暑假的时候准备去四川，因此你在网上查了一些资料，请用英语写出有关资料，与同学们分享。

　　四川省

　　位置 中国的西南部

　　省会 成都

　　景点 有众多的名胜古迹，其中著名的有：

　　九寨沟：位于四川西北，以湖最为出名，湖水清澈见底。

　　都江堰水利工程（the Dujiangyan Irrigation Project），建于2000多年前，至今仍发挥着作用。

　　特点 气候宜人，交通便利

　　以各式各样的麻辣小吃著名。

　　要求：

　　文章要包括以上所有要点，可以适当增加细节，以使文章连贯。

　　词数：120左右。开头已经为你写好，不及入总词数。

　　【写作指导】

　　旅游景点的描写应该属于介绍类说明文，写好这类文章，这对于我们平时对于介绍给亲朋好友一个你比较熟悉的地方时是很有帮助的，在写作时要注意下列问题：

　　1．不宜过多介绍景点，我们以跟介绍一下景点的历史、特色、以及它在当地的一个地位……

　　2．这种文章是客观的介绍。通常介绍其地理位置、面积、气候、自然资源和居民等，可以根据题目要求加上自己的评论。

　　3．组织这类文章的结构，要注意安排好说明顺序，描述要详略得当，重点突出，使文章错落有致。

　　4．描述地点时需要我们准确掌握表示方位的词或短语。

　　5．本文的时态主要以一般现在时态为主。

　　【学生习作】

　　①Today I will tell you some information about Sichuan Province’s travelling. Sichuan Province, ②which capital city is Chengdu, lies in the southwest of china and covers an area of about 485,000 square kilometers.

　　It is rich in tourist attractions and enjoys many world-famous places of ③interests , such as Jiuzhaigou and the Dujiangyan Irrigation Project. ④Jiuzhaigou is well known for its beautiful lakes, whose water is so clear that you can see the bottom of them. ⑤The other attraction is the Dujiangyan Irrigation Project, which was built over 2,000 years ago and is ⑥still playing a important part in irrigation today.

　　⑦In a word, the nice weather, convenient transportation and the variety of famous hot food can also⑧make your trip even more enjoyable.

　　【教师点评】

　　⑥ a→an。尽管这个地方由于失误出错，但是很好地用到了play part in 这个短语。

　　⑦In a word ，起到了承上启下和最后总结的作用。

　　⑧ 使用了“make sth.+形容词作宾补”这个结构。

　　实例指导3—介绍伦敦

　　【写作任务】

　　假设你是王林，在伦敦学习已经两个月了，写信给你在国内的朋友李平，介绍一下伦敦的情况。

　　伦敦是英国的首都，是一个大城市，在泰晤士河畔，人口约700万。

　　伦敦是一个繁忙的都市，人们非常友好并且乐于助人，但总是来去匆忙。

　　给你印象最深的是伦敦的天气变化无常（chop and change ）。

　　城里有许多著名的景观，你只游览了伦敦博物馆和著名的海德公园（Hyde Park）。

　　要求：不要逐条翻译，可以适当扩展。词数：120－150 。

　　【范文欣赏】

　　Dear Li Ping,

　　How time flies! It has been two months since I left China and came to London.

　　As you know, London is the capital of Britain, which is on the bank of

　　River Thames. It’s a very big city with a population of about 7 million. It is also a busy place. People here are usually friendly and helpful, but they are often in a hurry. What impressed me most is that the weather is chopping and changing. I begin to understand why the English people always talk about the weather. London has many beautiful parks and gardens and other famous places of interest. I have just been to London Museum and Hyde Park recently.

　　How are you now? I miss you very much. I hope I can hear from you soon.

　　Best wishes!

　　Yours,

　　Wang Lin

　　实例指导5--Exploration in Space

　　随着科技的发展,近年来,人类加强了对外层空间的探索,例如探索火星,但是最近有人提出探索外层空间耗资太大,这部分资金应该用在治理地球环境污染上。你是怎样看待这个问题的呢？最近你们学校校报的Talk栏目正在征集意见,请你写一篇120词左右的英文短文,阐述自己的观点。

　　1. 本写作任务要求我们写一篇议论性的短文来发表自己的观点。首先,我们必须要分析写作任务要求我们对什么问题发表自己的看法。弄清楚要讨论的问题后再确定自己的观点,并组织语言。确定了自己的观点后,应该用简明扼要的语言将自己的观点阐述清楚,然后再举出支持自己观点的理由。

　　2. 在确定了自己的观点和支撑自己观点的理由之后,我们就可以开始着手写作了。首先,我们可以用列举不同观点的方式引出自己的观点,比如,本写作任务中要讨论的问题是"到底应该把大量的资金投入到对外太空的探索中去,还是应该把这部分钱省下来用到保护我们的家园——地球上去"。我们可以这样写:As technology develops, people are spending a great sum of money on space exploration. However, some people With the development of science and technology, people are beginning to explore outer space. Some people say that this kind of exploration costs too much money, and that money should be used to deal with pollution on the Earth. I totally against this point of view.

　　In my opinion, exploring outer space will be good for human beings. First, it will help us find new resources. Second, it will help us learn more about the outer space. Finally, I believe it will also help us find ways to fight against pollution on the Earth.

　　这篇学生习作从总体上来看是符合写作任务的要求的。它抓住了写作任务要求谈论的问题,观点鲜明,语言也比较通顺,基本完成了写作要求。

　　但是,文章中也暴露出一些不足,首先,文章的结构是头大、身体小。这样,文章的重点部分,即阐明自己观点并说明原因的部分就显得非常薄弱。

　　其次,文章里的一些过渡做得不太好。如:第一、第二两句间过渡太仓促,如果改为:However, recently some people have said ..., 就很好了。      然后,第三句话I totally against this point of view应该是I am totally against this point of view, 小作者错把介词against 误用作动词,这也是一个常见的错误,同学们在平时写作中一定要注意避免犯语法错误。      最后,结尾句也略显仓促,如果改为In a word, exploring outer space should be encouraged and is worth the time and money we spend on it. 就更好地呼应了题目要求了。  

　　成稿:

　　In recent years, with the development of modern science and technology, people have been further exploring outer space. However, some people complain that this kind of exploration costs too much money, which should be used to protect the Earth. I don’t agree with this point of view.

　　In my opinion, exploring outer space has many advantages. Firstly, it will help us find natural resources that are running out on the Earth. This can greatly help ease the pressure on the Earth. Secondly, people will know more about outer space and learn Earth better by studying other planets. Finally, space exploration will help us find more solutions to Earth’s pollution problems.

　　In a word, exploring outer space should be encouraged and is worth the time and money we spend on it.

　　实例指导6--北京欢迎你

　　写作任务:

　　假如你的学校正在举行一场英语演讲比赛,请你拟一篇关于"北京欢迎你"的演讲稿,向外国友人介绍长城,天安门广场,和颐和园三个景点。并邀请外国友人来北京旅游。(词数:不少于120)

　　Welcome to China! Welcome to Beijing! Let me introduce some famous sights to you.

　　The Great Wall is an amazing sight. It was built 2,500 years ago. Chairman Mao once said, "He who does not reach the Great Wall is not a true man." There are some other spots, like Tian’anmen Square and the Summer Palace. Tian’anmen Square is one of the largest and oldest public squares in the world. Around it are halls, museums and monuments. Mao’s body rests in the Maozedong Memorial Hall. The Summer Palace is one of the best parks in the city, and lies in the northeast of the city. You can go there by bus or by car. There are many things to see in Beijing. I’m sure you will enjoy them all.

　　1. 初稿的优点:对文章的要点把握比较准确,文章的体裁及格式准确。

　　2. 不足之处在于文章的第一段和最后一段过于简单,因此难以激起读者了解北京的兴趣。

　　3. 在第二段的要点陈述中所运用的都是简单句,句型单调不够灵活,要点转换尤显生硬。

　　成稿:

　　Have you been to China? Have you been to Beijing? There are many cultural and natural sights in Beijing. The first place that you must visit is the Great Wall —a very beautiful place. It was built 2,500 years ago. As we all know, Chairman Mao once said, "He who does not reach the Great Wall is not a true man."

　　Next, let me tell you about Tian’anmen Square, the largest public square in the world. It was built as early as in 1651. Around it are halls, museums and monuments, including the Maozedong Memorial Hall, where Mao’s body rests.

　　The Summer Palace, one of the best parks in the city, is a favorite among tourists for sightseeing in Beijing. It is in the northeast part of the city. You may take a taxi or bus to get there.

　　There are also many other places to visit in Beijing. I’m sure you will enjoy them all.

　　1. 首尾呼应,画龙点睛。第一段提出了"Have you been to China? Have you been to Beijing?"的问题。而最后一段对文章概括之后,用一句"I’m sure you will enjoy them all."和第一段遥相呼应,使整篇文章给读者以浑

　　实例指导—郑和下西洋

　　六百多年前，我国就有了郑和下西洋的壮举，请根据下列表格中的内容写一篇120-150词的英语短文，叙述这—探险活动并发表你的看法。

　　时间 地点 意义

　　1405――1433年 到过东南亚、东非的30多个国家，最远到达非洲东海岸，还可能去过澳大利亚。 7次远洋探险展示了破国高超的造船技术，增进了中国和世界各国的了解和友谊。

　　【写作指导】

　　1．先审题，这个写作任务是让我们写一篇叙议结合的文章，记叙为主，议论为辅，前面先叙述郑和下西洋的探险活动，后面要有自己的感受，并且二者要有机结合起来；写的时候不能对表格内容进行逐字翻译，要进行整合：

　　2．文章的开头必须是一个点题的句子，如：

　　【参考范文】

　　There are many great adventurers in the history of China and Zheng He was one of them. From 1405 to 1433 , he made seven expeditions to the ocean, reaching nore than 30 countries in Southeast Asia and East Africa. And it is said that he was likely to have been to Australia, a strange and faraway continent.

　　As a result of his great achievement, the whole world came to realize advanced technology of the Chinese people in building ships and at the same time China strengthened its friendship with other countries. So every time I think of Zheng He, I feel very proud of our country and admire him very much. In my opimon, as students,.we should work hard at our lessons and try to build our motherland into a powerful'and rich country in the future.

　　【实战演练】

　　巴黎是法国的首都，也是一个梦幻般的城市，每年吸引世界各地大批游客来观光游玩。请根据以下要点以Paris为题用英语写一篇介绍巴黎的短文。

　　内容要点如下：

　　·

　　1．地理位置：法国北部；

　　2．人口：大约一千一百万；

　　3．气候：不太热也不太冷，春秋天最好；

　　4．基本情况：欧洲第二大城布。法国文化、教育、商业中心。时尚与浪漫之

　　都，很多重大活动在此举行。有悠久

　　的历史和丰富的旅游资源。最著名的

　　有艾菲尔铁塔(the Eiffel Tower)、凯旋门Triumphal Arch)和圣母院

　　(old Notre Dame)等。

　　注意：1)不要逐条翻译，但是可增加细节，以使文章连贯、通顺；

　　2)词数：120――150词左右。

　　Paris

　　Paris, the capital of France, is located in the north of France. It has a population of about eleven million. It is the second largest city in Europe. As for the weather, it never gets too hot or too cold. And it is at its best during the spring and autumn months.

　　Paris is the culture, education, business center of France. It is a city of fashion and romance. So many important events have been held here. Paris is a modem city with a long history and rich tour resources.

　　There are so many places for people to visit. The most famous are the Eiffel Tower, a Triumphal Arch and Old Notre Dame.

　　In a word, Paris is really a great and attractive city.

　　你们班即将进行"热爱家乡"的英语主题班会,请你写一篇小短文来介绍你的家乡,并邀请你的同学们前去游玩。你的家乡在发展特色旅游,如举办篝火晚会,教做风味小吃等活动。(词数:120左右)参考词汇:篝火bonfire

　　I love my hometown, which is located by the Yellow River. In the last five years, it has changed a lot by developing the tourism market. Its beautiful scenery is a big attraction for many people. To make the attraction stronger, we have decided to add some features to it. In the daytime tourists can learn about our food culture by

　　taking part in a course to learn how to make our special food. At night there is a big bonfire party where tourists and local people can dance and sing happily together. I am sure there will be many other interesting activities there soon, too. You are all welcome to visit my hometown. I’m sure you will have a good time there.

　　假如你校准备利用周末组织一次到附近山区的探险活动,学生热情很高,学校也做好了必要的安全准备,但此举却遭到了很多家长的反对,他们认为这个活动太危险,坚决不同意孩子参加。请你就该问题写一篇120词左右的文章,在你的英语博客上发表自己的看法。

　　Our school is planning to make an exploration of the mountains nearby that everybody would like to take part in. However, some parents don’t allow their children to go to the mountains, saying that it is very dangerous.     I don’t agree with these parents because this exploration will be good for all of us. Firstly, it will provide a great chance for us to get close to nature, which will help us learn things that we cannot learn from books. Secondly, it will help us build our character, making us brave and strong. Additionally, the school has taken necessary safety measures, so it won’t be as dangerous as some parents think.     In conclusion, I think this activity is good and hope everybody can enjoy it. And I hope that all of parents can support us. What’s your opinion?