考研英语复习资料考研英语作文范文的批改43

　　考研英语待批改作文：

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I am very glad to meet the news that your company is seeking employees about computer technology from news paper recently.It is a very good opportunity to me.

　　First of all,I have done experiment of the computer technology for five years,and Many practices help me to become a better worker.Secondly,I have not only abound knowledges,but also have a good honestness of vocation.lastly,it is possible that I afford to the work now if you can give me a chance.

　　I am looking forward to hearing your message. yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英语作文批改点评如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam, 【yours(y大写) sincerely,

　　Li Ming】(这一部分位于右下角，不是中间) 点评：5-6分最后一段可以加一句客套的话，例如Thanks for your time and consideration.等，以至于不会显的很单薄。语言的表达能力需要加强。这种作文可以多背几个模板。

　　I am very glad to meet the news that your company is seeking employees about computer technology from news paper recently. It is a very good opportunity to me.

　　First of all, I have done experiment of the computer technology for five years, and Many(m小写) practices help me to become a better worker. Secondly, I have not only abound(abound是个动词，这里需要个形容词abundant)knowledges(拼写错误), but also have(去掉，注意前边have位于not only之前) a good honestness(拼写错误) of vocation. lastly(l大写), it is possible that I afford to the work now if you can give me a chance.

　　I am looking forward to hearing(加介词from) your message.