考研英语复习资料考研英语作文范文的批改37

　　考研英语待批改作文：

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I believe that I will qualify for the job quite well.On the one hand,what I have

　　studied in the past four years was highly in accordance with the rules you offered.On

　　the other hand,I am a person who is always ready to cope with the others in the work

　　or the daily life. Besides,I have worked as a parttime staff in the IBM.So I reckon

　　that my experience will assist me adapt to the new environment more quickly.Whats more,

　　enclosed with the letter is my resume where further details of my informationis presented.

　　Finally,it would be grateful if you are so kind as to offer me the chance of being

　　interviewed so that I can further express myself.I am looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英语作文批改点评如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I am a senior student from the Department of Computer Science of Peking University. I am writing this letter to express my favour for the position as a software engineer which is advertised in(用on) your website.

　　I believe that I will qualify for the job quite well. On the one hand, what I have studied in the past four years was highly in accordance with the rules you offered. On the other hand, I am a person who is always ready to cope with the others in the work or the daily life. Besides, I have worked as a parttime(part-time) staff in the IBM. So I reckon that my experience will assist me adapt to the new environment more quickly. Whats more, enclosed with the letter is my resume where further details of(去掉，detail是个及物动词)my informationis(拼写错误)presented(这个词用在这里想要表达什么呢?现在的信息应该是present information).Finally,(这个词建议去掉) it would be grateful if you are so kind as to offer me the chance of being interviewed so that I can further express myself. I am looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely, Li Ming 点评：8-9分写的很不错!条理清楚，内容充实。注意以上几个细节性的问题。