考研英语复习资料考研英语作文范文的批改13

　　Im writing to apply for the position of Industrial Designer which you advertised in newspapers.

　　Therere a number of reasons which I can qualify for this job. The first and foremost, I major in Design in University, and I can work in it faster than others. Second, I have some years of work experience about this job. At last, I not only have the capacity of the social contact, but also have the enthusiasm about this position.

　　I would appreciate it if you would send me a reply at your earliest convenience.

　　Yours sincerely

　　Li Ming

　　考研英语作文批改点评如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam, Im writing to apply for the position of Industrial Designer which you advertised in newspapers. Therere a number of reasons which I can qualify for this job. The first and foremost(因为信件本身比较简洁，不要用很多的连词), I major in Design in University(没有说是具体的哪一所大学，不用大写首字母), and I can work in it faster than others(最好不要这样和别人进行比较，另外你不知道别的应聘者的水平). Second, I have some years of work experience about this job. At last, I not only have the capacity of the social contact, but also have the enthusiasm about this position. I would appreciate it if you would send me a reply at your earliest convenience. Yours sincerely(加逗号) Li Ming(与上边一行不要离这么远，落款这一部分要写在右下角) 点评：6-7分写的还不错的。写作内容方面需要适当调整，建议同学看一些范文。