考研英语复习资料考研英语作文范文的批改21

　　I am thank for you can spend your precious time reading my letter. The reason of writing this letter for me is today I find the message of recruiting about HR assistant on your companys website. I make insterested in this position and I want to apply for it.

　　Next I want to talk about my capability and experience for applying the job. I had been graduated from my university nearly one year. My major is English, but after finishing my university life, I worked in SN company and afforded the work of shop HR assistant.So I can skillfully operate the five object in human

　　resource:Salary,Recruitment,Trainging and so on. I can aslo skillfully operate the Word ,Excel and PPT. My deposition is outer and my ability of talking and communicating with somebody is great.

　　So I feel I alreadly fit for the needing of recruitng this position, if you give a chance for me trying it ,I will do my best in this positon. I would appreciate for the apply if you as soon as possibie. My contacted pnone number is 13757194566.

　　Yous sincerely

　　LiMing

　　2011,16th,October

　　考研英语作文批改点评如下：

　　Dear Miss Chen:(改成逗号)

　　I am thank for you can spend(thank you for spending) your precious time reading my letter. The reason of writing this letter for me(去掉，或者改成of me，建议去掉) is(加that，这里的that不能省略) today I find(应该用过去式，因为这个动作已经发生) the message of recruiting about HR assistant on your companys website. I make insterested(am interested) in this position and I want to apply for it.

　　Next I want to talk about my capability and experience for applying the job. I had been graduated from my university nearly one year. My major is English, but after finishing my university life, I worked in SN company(具体的某个公司的名称，首字母要大写)and afforded the work of shop HR assistant. So I can skillfully operate the five object(应该用复数) in human resource: Salary, Recruitment(r不用大写), Trainging(training) and so on. I can aslo(拼写错误also) skillfully operate the Word, Excel and PPT. My deposition is outer(这里要表达的是什么意思?) and my ability of talking and communicating with somebody is great.

　　So I feel I alreadly(拼写错误，建议去掉这个词) fit for the needing of recruitng(拼写错误recruiting) this position, if you give a chance for me trying(to try或是of trying) it , I will do my best in this positon(拼写错误，position). I would appreciate for the apply if you as soon as possibie(possible拼写错误，从句结构不完整，没有谓语动词). My contacted pnone(拼写错误，phone) number is 13757194566. 点评：4-5分要简洁明了，第一段我在哪看到招聘信息，应聘什么职位。第二段我有什么学历、什么工作经验、什么个人秉性等。第三段期待你的回复。所有的内容要简要说明就可以了，不是大作文，不要要写的内容很多。表达方面有待加强，需要看一看句子结构句式的语法信息。