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考研英语复习资料考研英语作文范文的批改2

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　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英语作文批改点评如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I am an undergraduate from the Department of business school(in Business Department)of Zhengzhou university(u大写). I am writing to convey my interest in your recently advertised at newspaper position(advertised修饰的position，所以他们不能离得太远，改成position at the newspaper) for a Secretary of manager.

　　I believe that I have the appropriate qualifications and experience make(makes，主语是experience)me a suitable candidate for this post .Firstly, I graduate(应该用过去式graduated)from zhengzhou university(首字母要大写) with a bachelors(bachelors) degree in business and as a president of the students union(student union) cultivate my outstanding organization capability in various practice. Secondly, In(i小写) order to rich practice experience I often attend some byworks in afterclass or vacation(after class or on vacation)during at(去掉一个介词)the four years. Thirdly, I am a very firendly(拼写错误，friendly) person who can working(情态动词后用动词原形work) with other colleagues harmonious and have strong sense of responsibility. Finally, I can communicate with others in english(English) fluently and familiarity with office soft. I have been passed the exam of college english(English) test band 4 and college computer test band 4.

　　Thank you for your consideration of my application at your earliest convenience. I would like to meet with(去掉，meet是及物动词)you in the near future.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　点评：5-6分

　　Zhengzhou University、English等一些很明显字母应该大写的地方没有大写。书信要简洁明了。另外注意一下单词拼写。

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