文章存在大量语法错误,影响得分,希望你以后多加注意,尤其是像单复数、单词的拼写这种错误切忌再犯,否则很容易给阅卷老师留下英语水平差的印象。
从内容来看,文章总分总的布局比较合理,首段对漫画内容的描述也比较到位,如果能够避免语法错误的话,首段基本没有什么问题。
第二段你先点出主题,后举了公司和排球队的例子加以证明,条例很清晰,但缺陷在于你两个例子之间的链接不是很紧密,给人一种堆砌的感觉,而且在举完实例之后没有任何深入阐述,道理阐述段略显单薄。
第三段你总结得较好,对合作精神的重要性进行了进一步的阐述。
总的来说,这作为你练习的第一篇作文,在文章段落的安排上还是比较合理,但以后要多多注意句式的多样性,如果可以的话,每段中使用一两个长句,可以给阅卷老师留下良好印象。但切记不要再犯语法错误,否则还不如写简单句。
经过一段时间的练习后写作能力能够有所进步!
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