考研英语作文批改范例20

　　Dear Sir/（改为or）Madam, 　　I write this letter to you in order（删除，重复） to find a candidate for （改为of）the Project Hope, because I have decided to offer financial aid to a child in a remote area. 　　As there are many children who need help, maybe I should let you know that the candidate I want to help would be a girl in primary school. 　　I have planned （一般现在时就可以plan）to keep offering her 1000 yuan a year until she graduated（原型graduate） from junior high school. Besides, I am quite willing to send her some used clothes and books, and I would really like to write letters to her. 　　Thank you so much for doing me this favour. I am looking forward to your reply.Sincerely, 　　Li Ming 　　点评：8-9分 　　文章的语言流畅，内容完整，结构也较为清晰。只是出现了个别的表达错误，希望引以为鉴。有一点需要说明的，你稍有一些受中文思维的影响，这就要求你在今后的学习中注意多学习地道的英文表达。