考研英语小作文批改感谢信5-7分例文4

　　考研英语待批改作文：

　　5-7分

　　第四篇

　　Dear sir，

　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your kindness to lend me the umbrella. If it had not been for your assistance in lending the umbrella to me when it was raining， I fear that I would have been in trouble to get home.

　　Every one agrees that it was you who always helping others in trouble. Again，I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.

　　Yours sincerely

　　考研英语作文批改点评如下：

　　Dear sir，

　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your kindness to lend me the umbrella. If it had not been for your assistance in lending the umbrella to me when it was raining， I fear that I would have been in trouble to get home.

　　Every one agrees that it was you who always helping(改为 helped) others in trouble. Again，I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.

　　Yours sincerely(加逗号)

　　加名字

　　5分

　　小作文的字数要求是100词，不要少于100词，否则是要扣分的。书信的写作格式要牢记于心。要注意时态的一致性。虽然作文没有什么大问题，但内容过于简单，其实你可以把内容再扩充一下，用一些高级的词汇和句型。