考研英语小作文批改投诉信0-4分例文4

　　考研英语待批改作文：

　　0-4分

　　第四篇

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I am a customer. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the poor quality of TV which I had bought in your department stores last week.

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is the worst after-sale service. In the first place, the saleswomans attitude is bad extremely. She shouted at me rudely and refused to examine it. In addition, because my abnormal operation resulted in the televisions fault, she said.Under these circumstances, I find it regretful to complaint the issue to occur any conveniences for you.

　　I appreciate it very much if you could solve the problem, preferably another replace it, and I would like to have this matter settled by next week.

　　Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英语作文批改点评如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I am a customer. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the poor quality of TV which I had (删除)bought in your department stores last week.

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is the worst after-sale service. In the first place, the saleswomans attitude is bad extremely. She shouted at me rudely and refused to examine it. In addition, because my abnormal operation resulted in the televisions fault, she said(这里应该再指出一个问题，而非第一个问题的论据).Under these circumstances, I find it regretful to complaint the issue to occur any conveniences for you.

　　I appreciate it very much if you could solve the problem, preferably another(删除) replace it(加with another one), and I would like to have this matter settled by next week.

　　Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　2分

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