Dear manager,
I am Li Ming.I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the moisturizing cream which I was buy in your shop in february.
The reason for my dissatisfaction is it has been bad before its useful-life. In the first place, it smells horrible now, just in october. In addition, it has been totally bad. I did not dare to use it anymore. Under this circustances, I find it terrible to your work and upset me.
I appreciate it very much if you could refund me, preferably, as soon as possible,and I would like to have this matter setteled by three days.
Thank you for consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
考研英语作文批改点评如下:
Li Ming.
Dear manager,
I am Li Ming.I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the moisturizing cream which I was buy in your shop in february(拼写错误,改为February).
The reason for my dissatisfaction is it has been bad before its useful-life(不能理解你的意思). In the first place, it smells horrible now, just in october(这是中式英语,应删除,此外月份要大写). In addition, it has been totally bad. I did not dare to use it anymore. Under this(改为these) circustances, I find it terrible to your work and upset me.
I appreciate it very much if you could refund me(加the money), preferably, as soon as possible ,and I would like to have this matter setteled (拼写错误,改为settled)by(后面是具体的时间,此处应改为in) three days.
Thank you for (加your)consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming.
2分
同学你好,标点符号与后面的单词空一格。语法错误比较多,建议你多背一些好的句型,此外,再细心一点,尽量避免出现单词拼写错误。
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