考研英语小作文批改投诉信5-7分例文1

　　考研英语待批改作文：

　　5-7分

　　第一篇

　　Dear Sir/Madam,

　　I am a collage sophomore tenant of Room 388 in Dorm-building 5. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about our dorm management.

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is our poor management and bad living environment. In the first place, our dormitory is not time limited use of electricity，the lights are not turn off at midnight. In addition, strangers can go in and out freely without any inquiries and checks. Under these circumstances, I find it difficult to bring me comfortable and safe study life.

　　I appreciate it very much if you could tighten up the management, preferably You could make the rules and regulations that strictly executed and I would like to have this matter settled by the next month. Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英语作文批改点评如下：

　　Dear Sir/Madam,

　　I am a collage (删除college)sophomore tenant of Room 388 in Dorm-building 5. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about our dorm management.

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is our poor management and bad living environment. In the first place, our dormitory is not time limited use of electricity (改为power rationing, 如果你不知道该如何表达宿舍晚上不限电，那么你可以不写这一句，直接说灯一直是开着的就可以了)，the lights are not turn off(,turn off 的主语是人，可改为on) at midnight. In addition, strangers can go in and out freely without any inquiries and checks. Under these circumstances, I find it difficult to bring me (加a)comfortable and safe study life.

　　I appreciate it very much if you could tighten up the management, preferably You could make the rules and regulations that strictly executed and I would like to have this matter settled by the next month. Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　5分

　　同学你好，考研英语小作文的要求是100词左右，考试时间非常紧，把过多的时间放在写小作文上是不划算的。如果在写作过程中，遇到自己不知该如何表达的句子，可以灵活一些，改为更为简单的句子，不要冒险。