考研英语小作文批改投诉信5-7分例文4

　　考研英语待批改作文：

　　5-7分

　　第四篇

　　Dear Sir ，

　　I am a customer of your store. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about a box of pen that I bought it from yours.

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is the quality of the pens is bad. In the first place，I found there is less two pens when I opened the box. In addition，a pen was broken and it didnt work. Under these circumstances， I find it very to your store.

　　I appreciate it very much if you could give me there pens，preferably replace the whole box，and I would like to have this matter settled by one day.

　　Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely，

　　Li Ming

　　考研英语作文批改点评如下：

　　Dear Sir ，

　　I am a customer of your store. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about a box of pen that I bought it(删除)from yours.

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is the quality of the pens is bad(删除). In the first place，I found there is less two pens when I opened the box(不用there be 句型，可改为I found the box lacked of 2 pens when I opened it). In addition，a pen was broken and it didnt work. Under these circumstances， I find it very to your store.

　　I appreciate it very much if you could give me there pens，preferably replace the whole box，and I would like to have this matter settled by(因为后面加的是具体时间，因此这里改为in) one day.

　　Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely，

　　Li Ming

　　5分

　　同学你好，考研小作文的字数要求是100词，不要超过太多，考试时间很紧张，把过多的时间用在写小作文上是不合理的。小作文字数已经很少了，因此尽量要避免出现整句错误。