考研英语小作文批改求职信5-7分例文2

　考研英语待批改作文：

　　5-7分

　　第二篇

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I just read an advertisement in yesterdays China Daily about the recruitment of your corporation. I would like to apply for a position as a business manager.

　　I understand that you are longing for highly-qualified individuals who process excellent skills, teamwork spirit and rich experience and I feel that I am competent to meet your requirement. My professional skills, as described in the enclosed resume, are well suit to your expectation. I am a recent graduate of Sun Yet-sen University with a bachorlors degree in Business Administration. In addition to having taken a broad range of courses, I served as a staff assistant at the China telecom, where my practical skills were rapidly cultivated and quickly developed.

　　I will be happy to meet with you at your convenience and discuss how my education and experience match. Thank you for your consideration.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英语作文批改点评如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I just read an advertisement in yesterdays China Daily about the recruitment of your corporation. I would like to apply for a position as a business manager.

　　I understand that you are longing for highly-qualified(改为high-qualified) individuals who process excellent skills, teamwork spirit and rich experience and I feel that I am competent to meet your requirement. My professional skills, as described in the enclosed resume, are well suit to your expectation. I am a recent graduate of Sun Yet-sen University with a bachorlors degree in Business Administration. In addition to having taken a broad range of courses, I served as a staff assistant at the China telecom, where my practical skills were rapidly cultivated and quickly developed.

　　I will be happy to meet with you at your convenience and discuss how my education and experience match. Thank you for your consideration.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　7分

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