写作原文
As is subtly portrayed in the drawing, the picture on the left illustrates a young boy wrote a famous football player name,Beckham , on his face, and the other picture on the right illustrates a young man who wants to have a hair style of Beckham and spends on 300RMB. These pictures illustratethe worship of star is popular in the modern society.There are some factors contribute to this phenomenon. The first factor that the ideology of young individuals in modern society is not independence . They do not know that what is worth to hold and what is they really want or need. The second factor that the atmosphere of the modern society is not verybenefit to the development of young folks. With the dissemination of TVs, magazines, and so forth, the environment of worship of star is increasing popularity. So it can influence young person always and everywhere.In my point of view, the preference of individual, there is no one right or wrong choice. Because various folks take different attitudes toward the phenomenon of worship, many may be like while other may not. But I deem, as college students, we should put our vigour on the learning rather than pursuing star.
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