写作原文
As is shown in the picture the humans divided alone keep contact with each other by internet. Every one owns a computer ,which is their mainly mean to contact out.In addition,there are spider net between everyone,which lead the people alone.The picture revealed a current social phenomenon that people dependent extravagantly on the internet rather than the normal conversation. The spider net is a great metaphor of the soul-wall,which alienateus,meanwhile,it is a net relate us. Whats more worrisome is that they not only contact with strangers with the net,but also families. It is a dangerous game! Maybe,it would make the families destruction.In my opinion,though the association in internet itself gives little cause for criticism,people should use it in a proper way. Chatting with strangers or distant fellows by computer is OK,but it is indispensable for us to use it in close friends. To have a good result,the society should encourage the people to focus more on the real world and the people themselves should enrich their lives and thoughts.
总体点评
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