英语六级考前热点高分范文八

　　Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic On Dieting. You should write at least 150 words, and base your composition on the outline below: 　　1)现在有越来越多人的选择节食，有的人是为了健康，但是更多的人是为了有一个苗条的身材 　　2)分析节食减肥可能带来的影响 　　3)你的建议 　　On Dieting 　　_______________________________________________________________________________ 　　_______________________________________________________________________________ 　　_______________________________________________________________________________ 　　行文思路 　　本题属于提纲式文字命题。提纲第1点指出一种现象并要求说明原因，提纲第2点要求分析这种现象可能带来的影响，提纲第3点要求针对该现象提出我的建议，由此可判断本文应为现象解释型作文。 　　根据所给提纲，本文应包含如下内容：描述越来越多的人节食的现象并分析主要原因;阐述节食不当可能带来的影响;针对节食给出我的建议。 　　高分范文 　　On Dieting 　　Nowadays more and more people are beginning to go on a diet. Some people are concerned with their health, and they go on a diet in order to lose unwanted weight. But still others, [1]especially the young women, are paying too much attention to their outward appearance. They [2]become the leading numbers who go on a diet. 　　[3]However, dieting might [4]bring great negative effects on people. [3]For one thing, quite a lot of people dont really need dieting to keep health, and they diet just because they want to keep slim. For them, dieting [5]not only is useless but also might damage their health. [3]For another, some people lack enough knowledge on how to diet scientifically. [3]As a result, they are likely to suffer from malnutrition. 　　[6]Considering the serious damage of unhealthy dieting, we should be cautious in dieting. [3]In my opinion, dieting,[7]for whatever reasons, needs professional guidance. [8]Only with right guidance can dieting work [9]as we expect. 　　【亮点点评】 　　[1]尤其，表示强调。 　　[2]成为主力军。 　　[3]过渡衔接词语，使文章条理清晰、衔接紧密。 　　[4]用于引出对危害或负面影响的阐述。 　　[5]not only but also用于连接并列成分。 　　[6]考虑到，鉴于，介词。 　　[7]不管因为什么原因，whatever意为无论什么。 　　[8]only+状语位于句首，引起句子部分倒装。 　　[9]像我们期望的那样。 　　佳句临摹 　　1.佳句：For them, dieting not only is useless but also might damage their health. 　　临摹：基因技术不仅使动植物受益而且还有助于提高人类的生活质量。 　　___________________________________________________________________________. 　　2.佳句：In my opinion, dieting, for whatever reasons, needs professional guidance. 　　临摹： 无论你的目标是什么，你都必须通过诚实的劳动来实现它。 　　___________________________________________________________________________. 　　3.佳句：Only with right guidance can dieting work as we expect. 　　临摹：只有修满足够的学分，学生才能够获准毕业。 　　___________________________________________________________________________. 　　【KEY】 　　1. Genetic technology helps not only the plant and animals but also human beings to live a higher quality 　　2. Whatever your aim is, you must worked honestly to attain it. 　　3. Only when adequate credits have been achieved can students gain the qualification for graduation.