Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic Parental Hopes and Personal Ideals. You should write at least 120 words, and base your composition on the outline below:
1)父母都会望子成龙,但是父母的期望有时候会与他们孩子的理想发生矛盾
2)分析这种矛盾产生的原因
3)应该如何解决这一矛盾
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行文思路
本题属于提纲式文字命题。提纲第1点提出一个问题,提纲第2点要求分析这一问题产生的原因,提纲第3点要求说明如何解决该问题,由此可判断本文应为问题解决型作文。
根据所给提纲,本文应包含如下内容:描述父母的期望和孩子的理想之间的矛盾;分析这种矛盾产生的主要原因;说明解决这一矛盾的办法。
高分范文
Parental Hopes and Personal Ideals
All parents hope their children will have a bright future. However, parents expectations for their children are not always in accordance with their childrens personal ideals, and sometimes they are even conflicting with each other. This is often a main cause for quarrels and gaps between parents and children. But what lead to the conflict between parental hopes and personal ideals?
The following three factors contribute to the conflict. First of all, in this fast-changing society, parents and children have too many differences in mind. Secondly, traditional patriarchy is still influencing Chinese parents in modern society. They are used to making decisions for their children. Third, nowadays young people have strong independence, who want to plan their own future and control their own destiny. Thus the conflict between parents and children inevitably appear.
In order to solve the conflict, both parents and children should pay their efforts. For one thing, parents should give their children rights to make their own decisions. They may help their children make choices instead of replacing them to make choices. For another, children should learn to respect their parents advices since parents tend to have more life experience. Besides, to communicate with each other actively is necessary to their understanding each other. As long as both parents and children learn to think from the other sides point of view, the conflicts between them can be avoided.
【亮点点评】
和一致。
表示递进。
通过转折和设问句引出原因,容易引起注意。
过渡衔接词语,使文章条理清晰、衔接紧密。
who引导非限制性定语从句。
为了,表示目的,常用于句首。
代替,而不是。
since引导原因状语从句,表示既定的原因,常译为既然。
从对方的角度。
佳句临摩
1.佳句:Parents expectations for their children are not always in accordance with their childrens personal ideals, and sometimes they are even conflicting with each other.
临摩:过多的压力使得许多大学生产生抑郁、焦虑等心理疾病,甚至导致一些大学生自杀。
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2.佳句:Nowadays young people have strong independence, who want to plan their own future and control their own destiny.
临摩:郊区的新鲜空气和美丽风景对那些忍受着空气污染和噪音的城市居民会有很大的吸引力。
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3.佳句:In order to solve the conflict, both parents and children should pay their efforts.
临摩:为了保持旧的友谊,许多同学每天花费一两个小时给亲密的老朋友打电话。
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【KEY】
1. Overdue pressure makes many college students suffer from psychological diseases, like depression, anxiety, and even leads to some students suicide.
2. The fresh air and beautiful scenery in the suburbs will be appealing to the city citizens, who suffer from air pollution and noises.
3. In order to keep those old friendships alive, many freshmen spend one or two hours a day calling their old close friends.
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