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Everyone has their owe(own) fridens ,somebody has a lot of friendswhile others have a few.But everyone has at least one friend.On(no) one is alone.
Making fridens is an easy thing but finding a good friden(friend) is not easy.A good friden(friend),who must be a sincere person and(who)we can trust each other.
Fridenship isveryimportant for us because we can share happiness and sorrowis with fridens.If you have some problems and you can ask for help from them,you can talk it and take some advices from your friends.
And if you have some happy things you can tell them ,they must be happy too.
文章整体立意没有问题,但是第二段描述找到好朋友不容易缺少支撑的观点和示例,过于单薄,另外几点建议:
1、单词的拼写要特别注意
2、定语从句的使用还没有掌握
3、标点符号和大小写要注意
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