2005年高考英语满分作文及名师的评析

2005高考英语满分作文

　　[全国卷I]

　　【试题回放】

　　假定你是李华，正是英国牛津参加短期语言培训，计划星期天去伦敦旅游。互联网上一则广告引起了你的注意，但一些具体信息不明确。请给该旅行社发一封电子邮件，询问有关情况。

　　注意：1.词数100左右，信的格式已为你写好。

　　2.可根据内容要点适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

　　3.参考词汇：牛津Oxford 费用fee

　　Dear Sir/Madame,

　　Im writing for more information about the day tour to London.

　　As a student at Oxford University, Id like to know if you have any special price for students. As for the money you charge, does it cover the entrance fees for visiting the places listed? What about lunch? Is it included? Or do I need to bring along my own food?

　　How long will the tour last? Since I need to prepare my lessons for the nest day, Id like to know the time to return. Besides, is there any time for shopping? I really want to have a look at the big stores in London.

　　Yours,

　　Li Hua

　　[名师点评]

　　本文是根据画面的提示来写一封电子邮件。作者在文章中首先把握了全部的要点，叙述较为完整;其次，作者运用一些过渡句和衔接词将文章串联，意思连贯。文章中采用了第一人称和一般现在时，这是值得肯定的地方。

　　[全国卷Ⅲ]

　　【试题回放】假设你是李华，最近国内一家英文报纸正在讨论北京动物园是否应迁出市区。以下是你所在班级讨论的情况。请你给该报写一封信，反映讨论结果。

　　赞成迁出：反对迁出：

　　1.游客多，交通堵塞

　　2.郊区环境好1.建于1906年，中外闻名

　　2.搬迁易造成动物死亡

　　注意：1.词数100字左右，信的开头已为你写好。

　　2.可根据内容要点适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

　　3.参考词汇： 郊区suburb

　　Dear Editor ,

　　Recently ,in our class there has been a heated discussion about whether the Beijing Zoo should be moved out of the city . Some of my classmates are in favor of the move .They say large crowds of tourists to the zoo will result in traffic jams .They also say that once moved ,animals will have more space and better living conditions in the suburbs .However ,other students are against the idea ,saying that the Beijing Zoo, built in 1906 ,has a history of 100 years ,and is well known at home and abroad .So it should remain where it is .Whats more ,moving may cause the death of some animals .To move or not ,this is a big decision which has to be made by people in Beijing.

　　Yours truly,

　　Li Hua

　　[名师点评]

　　这篇文章写得还是比较精彩的。要点表达得完整而准确，清楚展示了主题。先提出了文章的主题，进而列出了赞成的观点及其相关的理由，同时在其后又给出了反面的观点，论据十分充足。文章结构严谨，前后连贯。

　　【北京卷】

　　【试题回放】

　　第一节情景作文

　　美国中学生jeff将要来你所在的红星中学学习中文，经协商安排住在你家。假设你是李华，请给Jeff写一封信，按照下图顺序介绍他来中国后的生活安排。

　　注意：1. 信的开头已为你写好。

　　2.词数不少于60。

　　Dear Jeff,

　　Im Hua from Beijing Hongxing Middle School. Im very happy to learn that youre going to stay with my family while youre in Beijing.

　　While you are here, well provide you with a room of your own with a bed, a desk, a couple of chairs and a TV. Youll also have your own bathroom. Our school is quite close to our home, so we could go to school together by bike. At noon well eat at the school dining hall. Im sure youll like the delicious Chinese food there, and enjoy talking with friends over lunch. Classes in our school usually finish at 4 in the afternoon. You can then join other students in playing ball games or swimming. Itll be a lot of fun.

　　If you have any questions or requests, please let me know. Well try our best to make your stay here in Beijing a pleasant experience.

　　Best wishes,

　　Li Hua

　　[名师点评]

　　这篇文章的特点还是比较清晰的，第一，作者根据图画将文章的要点概括完整，内容充实而丰富，结构紧凑，有层次感;第二，本文没有采用华丽的辞藻，但用词十分恰当，段落过渡自然，令人耳目一新。