2008年高考英语满分作文及名师的评析

假定你是李华，从小喜爱大熊猫,一直通过有关网站,一直通过有关网站关注三年前在美国圣迭哥动物园出生的大熊猫苏琳和她的母亲白云。现在苏琳即将三岁。请根据以下要点给动物园工作人员写一封信：

　　1、 自我介绍;

2、 祝贺苏琳生日;

3、 感谢工作人员;

4、 索取苏琳三岁生日照。

　　注意：1、词数100左右;2、可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯;3、开头语已为你写好。

　　例文：

　　Dear Sir/Madam,

　　Greetings from China!

　　Im Li Hua, a student in Sichuan. Ive been a panda lover since I was a child. About three years ago I was delighted to learn that Baiyun gave birth to her daughter Sulin and Ive been watching her grow on your website,. Now shes going to be three. Id like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the US.

　　By the way, could I have a photo of Sulin taken on her third birthday? Thank you very much in advance.

　　Yours truly,

　　Li Hua

　　【名师点评】本文写作的内容要点如下：

　　1.自我介绍;2.信息来源;3.祝贺生日;4.感谢照顾;5.索取照片;6.合适的结尾。

　　这封信格式正确，行文规范，描述有条不紊，称呼、正文中的开头及结尾、结束语均表达到位。文章行文活泼，感情真挚，语言表述准确，洋溢着作者因大熊猫得到精心照顾而对美方人员的感激之情，以及希望自己愿望成真，得到照片的希冀之情。长短句运用合理，结合了简单句和复合句，流畅自然，不露痕迹，的确是一篇佳作。

　　积累卡片英汉互译

　　好词1.delighted adj.欣喜的，快乐的 2.express v.表达 3.give birth to v.产生，生育

　　好句Id like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the US.

　　我祝福它生日快乐并且对你们的辛勤工作表达我的感激之情，正是你们的努力工作让苏琳和它的父母在美国过着幸福和健康的生活。

　　评析：定语从句的使用。

　　【北京卷】

　　【试题回放】假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华，为校刊英语园地写一篇题为Our Spring Outing 的英文稿件。 请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，叙述上周你们班从准备春游到春游结束的完整过程。

　　注意： 词数不少于60.

　　提示词： 游乐园 amusement park 垃圾箱 bin

　　Last Thursday, we had a class meeting to discuss where to go for our spring outing. We came up with several choices such as going boating, climbing a mountain, and going to an amusement park. Finally, we decided to go mountain climbing.

　　The next day, we set off early in the morning. While climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view . However, when we reached the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels. Then we started to pick up the litter and put the rubbish into the nearby recycling bin and non-recycling bin respectively.

　　We were tired but happy.

　　【名师点评】

　　本情景作文的内容要点如下：1.讨论;2.爬山;3.检拾别人的垃圾;4.投放垃圾。内容要点可用不同方式表达。本文覆盖了所有内容要点，较好地完成了试题规定的任务。其中，写作主题突出，详略得当，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，而且有效的使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文机构紧凑。本文叙述清楚，描写细致，准确运用了很多富有表现力的词和句型，例如：set off early，enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view, were shocked to see litter here and there 等，将活动的情形很形象地描述了出来。

　　积累卡片英汉互译

　　好词1 set off 出发 2. litter n.废弃物 3.respectively adv.分别地

　　好句1.While climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view .

　　在爬山时，我们享受着温暖的阳光和美丽的风景。

　　1. However, when we reached the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels.

　　然而，当我们登上山顶，被眼前的一幕惊呆了：瓶子和香蕉皮这样的废弃物到处都是。

　　评析：细节描写，生动形象。shock一词也用得生动传神。

　　【江苏卷】

　　【试题回放】实现有效的沟通，建立良好的人际关系，不仅要善于言表，更要学会倾听。请你根据下表中所提供的信息，写一篇题为 Being a Good Listener 的英文演讲稿。

　　为何倾听表示尊重，增进理解，建立良好的人际关系

　　谁来倾听家长倾听孩子理解孩子，消除代沟，

　　老师倾听学生了解学生，满足需求，

　　同学相互倾听增进友谊，互帮互学，

　　怎样倾听

　　注意：

　　1、 对所给要点，逐一陈述，适当发挥，不要简单翻译。

　　2、 词数150左右。开头和结尾已经写好，不计入总词数。

　　3、 演讲稿中不得提及考生所在学校及本人姓名。

　　Good afternoon, everyone.

　　The topic of my speech today is Being a Good Listener.

　　Good listening can always show respect, promote understanding, and improve interpersonal relationship.

　　Many people suggest that parents should listen more to their children, so they will understand them better, and find it easy to narrow the generation gap; teachers should listen more to their students, then they can meet their needs better, and place themselves in a good relationship with their students; students should listen more to their classmates, thus they will help and learn from each other, and a friendship is likely to be formed.

　　What I want to stress is that each of us should listen to others. Show your respect and never stop others till they finish their talk; show you are interested by a supportive silence or a knowing smile; be open-minded to different opinions even though you dont like them. In a word, good listening can really enable us to get closer to each other.

　　Thank you for your listening!

　　【名师点评】

　　这是一篇感情真挚、热情洋溢的演讲稿，文中大量运用排比句型，不但准确流畅地表达出题目中所提供的信息，而且体现出作者熟练运用英语的能力以及不俗的文采。第三段中所使用的相同结构的复合句式，将倾听的对象及其作用阐述得淋漓尽致;而第四段中用一系列的祈使句议论应如何倾听，则更进一步地增强了这篇演说稿的说服力。

　　积累卡片英汉互译

　　好词1.promote v .促进 2. interpersonal adj.人际的3. generation gap. 代沟

　　4. open-minded adj. 虚心的

　　好句1. students should listen more to their classmates, thus they will help and learn from each other, and a friendship is likely to be formed.

　　同学之间应该互相倾听，这样他们可以互相学习和帮助，也会形成友谊。

　　评析：复杂句的组合，被动句的使用。

　　2. What I want to stress is that each of us should listen to others.

　　我想强调的是我们每个人都应该更多的倾听他人。

　　评析：复合句的使用。

　　【湖北卷】

　　【试题回放】假设你是卜曼宜，你购买了一部某外国公司生产的手机，因有质量问题，要求该公司更换。请根据下列要点，用英文写一封电子邮件。

　　要点：1. 问题：手机不响铃，不能发短信;该产品已售完，无法更换;型号新，无配件，无法维修。 2. 要求：公司应尽快予以更换。

　　注意：1. 词数为100左右;

　　2. 参考词汇：配件 spare part;

　　3. 电子邮件的开头和结尾已为你写好;

　　4.已给出的电子邮件的开头和结尾不得抄入答题卡。

　　Dear Sir，

　　I am writing to you for the mobile phone of Dephone-S250 I bought on 20th Apr.2008 at Tele Mall in Wuhan, P.R. China. Ten days after that, it didnt ring and send short messages. Then I took it to the seller, but was told that the model had been sold out and I had to wait at least three months for a new one. I had no choice but to go to the repairman. To my disappointment ,he said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts. I was so desperate on hearing that for I can not wait that long. Therefore, I have to require that you send me a new one of the same model within a month.

　　Thank you for your consideration.

　　Sincerely yours,

　　Bu Manyi

　　【名师点评】

　　本文内容要点齐全，语言丰富，结构合理，如头两句说明了购买手机后发现故障的情况，中间部分说明了无法维修而必须让公司更换手机的原委，最后明确提出自己的要求，明白流畅，将题目所提出的要点全部表达清楚，较好的完成了任务。全文以一般过去时为基调，结合主动语态与被动语态，并使用了so, but, therefore 等连接词，使文章结构完整严密。固定短语，如be sold out ,at least, had no choice but to go, to my disappointment, on hearing that 等的使用，使文章的语言显得地道而精炼。

　　积累卡片英汉互译

　　好词1. disappointment n.失望 2.desperate adj.绝望的3. consideration n.体谅

　　好句To my disappointment ,he said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts.

　　令我失望的是，他说因为在中国是新款手机，所以没有配件来修理。

　　评析：复杂句的组织; to my disappointment, 常用短语。