下面雅思为大家整理了雅思写作范文:动物实验,供考生们参考,以下是详细内容。
The animal experimentation is very difficult issue with a lot of people feeling very strongly of it, we are use the animals for the experimentation in different way, one of most big problem is for test the cosmetics, the images of animals with things put in their eyes for so we are able to look a bit better make many people very angry. Is it necessary?
The companies such as the body shop said that they do not experiment on animals and they produce good cosmetics who make money, I am not agree that making the cosmetics that make our faces better does not mean the animals must suffering in terrible ways, it does not seem moral for me. On the other hand we also use the animals for test the new drugs.
Without these new drugs people die and suffer when they need not, some of the people believe that the animals should not suffer and die so that we can avoid it, I am not agree here, these people will change the minds when it is they who are die or one of their children, it is sad that the animals have to suffer for this thing but here I believe that the suffering is justify. Is there alternative to the animal experimentation?
Im not expert but I dont think so, the monkeys are most near biology animals and without test to them, we cannot sure of affects of the new drugs, we test on humans also but only when we know the drugs not a problem to us, the testing on humans without the tests on the animals could make the tragedies.
So in conclusion I do not believe that the animal testing is justify for not essential things but for essential things I believe that there is not choice and it is justify.
Estimate Estimated IELTS Writing Band 6
IELTS Examiner Commentary
This essay was written by a Pakistani IELTS student studying in the UK.
The Academic Task 2 Writing is marked in 3 areas. Lets look at these.
Arguments, Ideas and Evidence
This band grades the essay on its content, how it structures its ideas and backs up the ideas with examples. First of all this essay is not set out as an essay should be. It is all together in one big lump that shows a lack of organization. Apart from that though the essay is relevant to the question and has good ideas with examples to back them up. This essay would get a quite good band for Arguments, Ideas and Evidence.
Communicative Quality
This mark grades the candidate on how easily the reader understands the essay. This depends on accuracy in structure, grammar, punctuation and vocabulary, as bad grammar, punctuation and vocabulary will cause a breakdown in communication. The worst problem affecting the Communicative Quality is the lack of organization in the structure. The entire essay is in one big paragraph and the punctuation within the paragraph is poor. There are too many commas and not enough full stops. This makes the reader go from one sentence into another without realizing it and the change of meaning from one sentence to another makes the reader have to stop and go back to find out when the change of meaning happened. On top of this the spelling and grammar is often faulty and this makes it difficult for the reader. Connecting language is not used that well either though there is some good usage . So, this essay would not get a good band for Communicative Quality.
Vocabulary and Sentence Structure
With Vocabulary the examiner looks at the range of words used and whether they are used in the right place and at the right time. With Sentence Structure, the examiner looks at the grammar. The word choices themselves in the essay are not bad at all but their spelling is not that good. As pointed out above the grammar is not good. There are problems with articles , tense choice and formation , verb patterns , prepositions , superlatives amongst others. The punctuation is also bad. The writer has used commas mostly instead of full stops and he doesnt use question marks for his questions. This essay would not get a very good band for Vocabulary and Sentence Structure.
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