那鱼那鹰那人

我把自己比喻成一条鱼，我要努力寻找离开水的出口。

I compare myself to a fish, and I try to find the exit from the water.

我把自己比喻成一只鹰，我要全力飞出蓝天的庇护。

I compare myself to an eagle, I want to fly out of the blue sky with all my strength.

我就是我自己，我要跑，跑出父母的视线，跑上自己的轨道。 ――题记

I am myself, I want to run, run out of my parents' sight, run on my own track. Inscription

起跑

Start off

那年高考，发挥失常，落榜了。我坚决地拒绝复读，执意背着大大的旅行包，踏上了北上的火车。隔着玻璃窗，我看见母亲在哭泣，父母在叹气，鼻头有点发酸，转过脸，说好不哭的。“呜――”一声长鸣，火车开动了，母亲也随即跟着火车跑，一遍一遍的挥手，一遍一遍的嘱咐。我抬头看着天空，灰蒙蒙的，它也是如此寂寞。

In that year's college entrance examination, it was out of order and failed. I firmly refused to read again, determined to carry a big bag, set foot on the North train. Through the glass window, I saw my mother crying, my parents sighing, and my nose was a little sour. I turned around and said not to cry. "Woo..." a long cry, the train started, and then my mother followed the train, waving again and again, asking again and again. I look up at the sky, gray, it is so lonely.

跑程

running distance

离开了母亲的日子是惬意的。至少我可以把房间弄得乱七八糟而不用担心有人穿着围裙在门口喋喋不休；至少可以不用理会邻居们鄙视的目光，不用直视老师们失望的眼神，不会听见父母心碎的声音。但同时也伴随着心酸。每个公司去应聘，我的表现总会令人满意的，可一看到我的学历，笑脸马上变成了疑问，话语也变成了“回去等消息吧！”那一刻，我感觉全世界都抛弃了我。

It's nice to leave my mother. At least I can make a mess of the room without worrying about someone wearing an apron and chattering at the door; at least I can ignore the contempt of neighbors, the disappointment of teachers and the heartbreak of parents. But it's also accompanied by heartache. Every company to apply for a job, my performance will always be satisfactory, but when I see my education background, the smiling face immediately becomes a question, and the words also become "go back and wait for the news!" At that moment, I felt that the whole world had abandoned me.

那天晚上回到宿舍，摊在沙发上，突然一阵闪电划过深蓝色的苍穹，几声雷鸣似乎要将一切生灵唤醒。想起了父母做的香喷喷的红烧鱼；想起了父亲语重心长的教诲；想起了家门前那棵歪脖子的老槐树；想起了院里那张缺角的乒乓球台；想起了高三那年那些挑灯夜读的日子……看着金鱼缸里的金鱼。我想鱼，终究离不开水。

That night, I went back to the dormitory and spread out on the sofa. Suddenly, a flash of lightning across the dark blue sky. Several thunders seemed to wake up all the creatures. I think of my parents' fragrant braised fish, my father's earnest teaching, the old pagoda tree with crooked neck in front of my house, the table tennis table with missing corners in the courtyard, the days of reading at night in senior three Look at the goldfish in the goldfish tank. I think fish can't live without water.

第二天，天放晴了，我拿起电话，拨通了那串最熟悉的号码。“喂，请问找哪位？”“……”“喂，怎么不说话？”“妈，是我！”“小丹，是你吗？真的是你吗？”“妈，我累了！”“孩子，累了就回家，知道吗？”“哎，妈，我要回家。”城市的夜晚依然灯火阑珊，路上的行人仍然神采奕奕。只是，我将与这一切告别，回到给予我生命之源的那片净土上去。

The next day, it cleared up. I picked up the phone and dialed the most familiar number. "Hello, who can I speak to?" "..." "Hey, why don't you talk?" "Mom, it's me!" "Xiaodan, is that you? Is it really you? " "Mom, I'm tired!" "Boy, you can go home when you're tired, you know?" "Oh, Ma, I'm going home." The city's night lights are still dim, and the pedestrians on the road are still in high spirits. But I will bid farewell to all these and return to the pure land that gave me the source of life.

终点

End

我终究还是回来了，回到这个有着无数的气息的地方。一切都没有改变，我决定复读，我也不是不跑了，只是希望有一个更高的起跑点。

After all, I came back to this place with countless breath. Everything hasn't changed. I decided to read again. I didn't stop running, just hope to have a higher starting point.

后记：鱼终究是离不开给予它生命之源的水。

Postscript: fish is inseparable from the water that gives it the source of life.

鹰，终究离不开给予它希望之源的天空。

The eagle, after all, cannot leave the sky that gives it the source of hope.

我，始终逃离不了父母和亲人朋友们的爱心交织成的幸福圈……

I can't escape from the happy circle of love between my parents, relatives and friends

点评(中南大学附属实验中学副校长、语文高级教师 陈 军)：这篇作文拟了个有意蕴吸引人的标题，有“文好题一半”的效果。从立意上看，紧紧扣住“跑的体验”讲自己的感受，谈自己的情感体验，容易引起共鸣。从结构上看，题记画龙点睛，小标题为本文增色不少。关注生活，关注人生是本文写作成功的关键要素。

Comments (Chen Jun, vice president and senior Chinese teacher of Experimental Middle School Affiliated to Central South University): this composition has drawn up a meaningful and attractive title, which has the effect of "half of the questions are good at writing". From the point of view, it's easy to resonate when we talk about our own feelings and emotional experience by closely clasping the "running experience". From the structural point of view, the title makes the finishing point and the subtitle adds a lot of color to this article. Paying attention to life and life is the key to the success of this paper.